the lot was slick & dark;
cold moonbeams shivered down
my spine
black ice crisscrossed in
your eyes, just waiting for me
to fall
silver fingertips at your sides,
and your smile eclipsed
my everything
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Comments
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great piece
i love the imagery -
Very nicely done. The last stanza is chilling, well it all is really. Very spine tingling and bone chilling. I can't say anything bad about it, it flawless!
cassie
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lovely work thanks for entering
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the last two lines are what did it for me. With the title, you could have just those two lines and have a complete love poem in and of itself. Thanks for entering
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I like the idea here. "criss-crossed" is actually 'crisscrossed.'
I like the length of it and how you were straight to the point with the reader. Very important to do that effectively.
Thanks for entering! -
"silver fingertips at your sides,
and your smile eclipsed
my everything"
Wow, love this piece, awesome.
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I don't quite see how this fits my prompt.
but thanks for entering.
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silver fingertips at your sides,
and your smile eclipsed
my everything
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now this, is what i call amazing sis. =]
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wow, great take on the prompt. i really like this piece, the imagery is beautiful and it's written very well. i love the last stanza, it really hit hard.
thanks for entering and goodluck
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Whirrr... -in awe-
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Wow!! Great take on the prompt. Well thought of and expressed. Best of luck in the contest.
Love&Peace
~Noor
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ohhh very good take on the prompt
good luck
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