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Andvaka Draumur

The little boy,
who leans himself against the window,
sighs himself into slumber -

eyes open,
staring at the rolling green lands
that lay before him.

"Verdant"
is a word that may
come to mind,

his tongue lush
with the hope
of a sunny spring.

Excitement bubbles inside him,
and soon he is out of his body,
out of his mind

and dreaming in air --













Author notes

Inspired by the 3rd picture:

http://onetaintedangel.deviantart.com/art/Dreams-of-flying-away-71177761

Title= "sleepless dream"

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Comments


  • new born
    February 21

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    This is really good! I love the imagery, and the wording is sublime. Amazing write, well deserved gold.


  • lindaburns gold member
    January 28

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    Interesting and I dare say, different
    take on the picture.
    Please excuse my lack of knowledge,
    and tell me what “andvaka draumur”
    means. Daydreams . . .hmmm . . .


    • birdlove
      January 29
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      Thanks for the comment...

      Title means "sleepless dream."


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    December 14, 2008
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    "his tongue lush
    with the hope
    of a sunny spring." - great write

    good luck