the roar of the door
was thunder in her ears
another night, too many tears
she's so done with those damned tears
gun in hand, just for her man,
tonight he'll know that she knows
it will be hers, and it will be intoxicating
years of loyalty dissipating into hateful reverence,
the spell has now been broken,
like her heart, her soul
Author notes
Prompt: Vengeance
30-75 words
A contest entry
- Vengeance Is Sweet... [Quickie :]] by just weak hands.
550 points, ended January 2, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Whoaa o.o
Someone's gonna have some trouble tonight xD
Yes, I agree with moonlitmirror ! That's exactly what I was thinking when I read this !!
The emotion is apparent, and i love how you ended it. It just kind of wrapped up everything, no explanation even needed there !
Thanks for entering and best of luck !
[and i have to thank you for actually following the rules ! there are many that i have to disqualify because they entered extremely LONG prewrites -sigh- lol]
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ooo...this brings to mind the quote "hell hath no fury like a woman scorned"
I like how you use the word "intoxicating"--that pretty much captures the entire essence of it. It's like they lose the rational part of themselves, but they can still think in calculated ways.
Great job, good luck! -
Oh gosh I was not excepting this but non the great piece here good luck to you in the contest best wishes always
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Aw, hell- somebody's gonna catch it.... Well written, drips with righteous anger!
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