Bottled, wasted, not enough.
I use you, abuse you, far too much.
Flying by, standing still...
How you tease me, please me, thrill.
I try to hold you, control you...
Oh your demise.
How with you...I am not wise.
A contest entry
- Wasted time? by Talitha777.
1000 points, ended December 21, 2008, 26 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How are you with time?
Comments
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now that is a concept! and what a good write too! i'm impressed! and like sebastian bach said when critiquing the limp biscuit song "give me something to break", now who can't relate to that!
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This is really good. I don't know what I was expecting, but you blew my expectations. I like the rhyme, and I love what you said here. Great job!!
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this is really cool.
i love the format and the way you shaped the words is quite nice. i love the first line. great write, congrats on the bronze!
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