I built my love out of star dust;
out of yesterday and a hope of tomorrow.
I saw a flash of sky through the trees
and stars burst into motion,
turning and crashing in orange flames
that rose through my body
and kindled my love.
We laid together and watched the stars,
who bowed before us
and played like soft violins,
trembling with ebony music
that filled the spaces between our beating hearts
and made them warm and unbearable and electric.
The air around us hummed and glowed
and fireflies danced around us,
casting our contours in the glow of
love? lust?
Maybe.
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My fingertips are buzzing with the notion
of you-
your skin, which binds your muscles,
strung to bones by twining tendons,
is a mystery to touch.
There’s a magic in your DNA;
a symmetry in our biologies,
our bodies composed of chemical compounds
that burst into a fluttering life,
borne in the flames of a star
that flung atoms together
and strung protons and neutrons
on a necklace of destiny,
diamonds of cosmic debris.
The components of our blazing bodies
were flung in spatial currents
and drifted through Time until they
bore our existence and strung us together,
magnetic and insistent.
We are star dust from the same sun,
reincarnated across the eons,
wanting each other-
parts of the same whole.
Author notes
For my beloved husband, with whom everyday I am reminded of the great, unfailing love we share.
A contest entry
- round two; show me your heart by broken-colours.
700 points, ended January 10, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Loved Ones by Need For Redemption.
435 points, ended December 24, 2008, 12 entries
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550 points, ended April 15, 55 entries
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800 points, ended January 18, 21 entries
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400 points, ended January 26, 37 entries
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850 points, ended March 17, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
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700 points, ended March 22, 37 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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congrats on the trophies....enjoyed reading it with some good expressions...i liked the the first part more...
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Wondrous.
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congrads this was worth gold i love it
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I really enjoyed reading this...
I asked my Love to help me and she was right in saying'''it is worth the read...and you followed the rules
Love it
Piff
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excuse my mouth okay but when you read work like this for some one like me it so good it makes you cuss this poem is a fucken wild out riot and you are so bad with what you bring to the table artist you should be called the baddest
sorry my title okay i have a three line rule and dammit you ace that with this >I built my love out of star dust; i have another rule don't make me fucken slouch nor yawn with this you made me sit up> here’s a magic in your DNA;
a symmetry in our biologies,
our bodies composed of chemical compounds
You are tha baddest coming from the baddest
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I have seen this one before. I liked the beginning better than the middle and ending. You used imagery well though. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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This is really quite wonderful. I don't think this is a feeling that can be achieved very often so congrats! ^^
The way you described everything was superb!
I enjoyed reading this piece.
Good job, good luck, and keep up the great writing!
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wow. awesome write! ^.^
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thank you. i know this is a shameless plug, but i just wrote a poem for a contest i'm super proud of, and i'd love it if you read it. it's called "Run, Cinderella Girl, Run".
i'm very proud of this write, and want to share it with everyone.
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awe this is sooooo romantic. I just love the way you started this poem. The way you built your love. Great creative write that you have here. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering it into our contest.
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I like the way this is written. The separation of the lines realy adds enfacise to each one
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Definitely not your run of the mill romantic poem & I think that's super. You used creative imagery and unique ways of expressing it. Kudos. : )
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i love this huni! i love how you compare stuff to so many things in nature its just awsome!! great write sweets
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This simply blew me away; it was so incredible and so full of love and devotion. The second part is my absolute favourite, but the whole thing is magical & full of everything I like : stunning imagery, interesting metaphors that weave everything together, and pure emotion.
Thanks very much for entering!
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