Milling crowds
Where is time?
Helping strangers
Out of line!
Yet sometimes
There’re a few
Who'll lend a hand,
Nothing in lieu
Making this world
To my surprise
A beautiful
Paradise
Author notes
Author notes
30 words
30 minutes
Prompt: Paradise of Strangers
A contest entry
- Time for Quckie! 10/30/30 by Hikari Lady.
700 points, ended December 13, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Aw thats nice, the backround is great too!
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Nicely expressed.
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The very few who make this paradise are an exception to the rule, I wish there were many like you about, lovely breeze of words.
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heyyyy
thanks buddy!
am happy u enjoyed the poem
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Beautifully written with an interesting rhyme scheme xx Great take on the prompt hun xx
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Nicely written. I liked your rythme, it seemed to give the poem stronger flow and stracture.
I enjoyed reading this, thanks for entering and good luck.
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This was very well said and penned!
Helping out a stranger can take us to a surreal peace.
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Thankyou..
Am so happy you appreciated the poem
I agree, the joy of giving far exceeds the joy of receiving...
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Well done Good luck to you in the contest.
Much love
Ylova
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hey Yolva,
thank you
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