You were my angel in disguise
eclipsed the night with dawn,
you showed me how to touch the moon
two hearts forever drawn.
Sleeping in dusk's tender arms
our spirit's reached the sun,
touching red hot flames of love
a journey just begun.
Yet all too soon the night closed in
the devil came to call
and shadows of despondency
across my star did fall.
Clearly the twilight of our time
had reached a darkened summit,
yet hope still filled my trusting thoughts
for to you I did commit.
That text it came one twilight night
my heart was slowly breaking,
just like some distant memo
its meaning, no mistaking.
The sun and moon don't look the same
their glow has quickly paled,
too late you let me know your wish
with a simple, detached email.
Author notes
Title 1 - The Memo Came Too Late
PLUS Wordbank (hope that's ok)
Words used in order - angel, eclipse, dawn, moon, sleeping, dusk, sun, night, devil, twilight, breaking (11 words)
In a list
A contest entry
- Titles, Pictures, Word bank, Story, and Quotes. Come look! by Missa.
650 points, ended January 1, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very nice and clever.
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omg! love this! and of course its fine that you used two prompts!
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wonderful
So very creative and expressed. Best of luck in the contest.
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word bank mm but electronic 'dear johns' how painful , great good luck
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Wow~
Oy!!! This is one tight piece You have penned Beautiful and Love the use of the word bank
Bravo!! You are good
Woot!
Powerful story told
Excellent!
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet One
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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That flows so smoothly. Pleasure to read, thanks.
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I love how you told a story with the word bank. I find word banks frustratingly hard to use. You have written using the word bank with seeming ease. That last stanza just stings and leaves you numb -- great effect. Love it.
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Wonderfully Said
Truely avery meaningful write here and I think you did so well with both of the prompts here. Thanks for sharing it with me. All the best in the contest, Michele
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You'd never know you wrote this from a word bank..it reads so beautiful..with that hint of sadness. Great write here my friend..always a pleasure reading your work. Best of luck!
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I didnt even noticed you had a word bank to follow,
the signs of a good poet
So well done Gaylene
All the best to you in the contest
Ken
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Such a sad story, it is almost like the suicide of someone, where you get that goodbye and there is no time to act. It is hard to read and even harder to fathom where the depths of something like this come from but your rhyme and choice of words were outstanding to convey the desperate feeling this sends out. Best to you in the contest
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