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Healing Waves

 

Yesterday's memories linger in velvet air

aching my eclipsed soul.

 

Love letters and movie tickets, surfacing feelings

that should be dissipating into nothingness.

 

Candy-floss colored teddy bears

hidden in cluttered cupboards,

diffusing faint scents of your cologne into this empty chamber.

 

The acid of your words, the bitterness of your actions

along with traces of your existence; stored in this carton box

   that is soon to be released into drfting waves of forgotten memories.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: Cardboard Box
10 lines
30 minutes

 

Picture Credit: http://memoriesgeek.com/box%20memories.jpg

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  • xDemonicxAngelx
    December 22, 2008

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    I loved your take on the prompt! This was so well written and I bet that lots of people can relate to it. Congrats on the silver my dear!

    Take care


  • Joseph Hollis
    December 13, 2008

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    Sometimes boxes can hold memories that we'd rather forget about. Excellent take on the prompt.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 13, 2008

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    you know as i read this my room is full of old boxes kind of made me look at them all, keep it flowing and congrads on the contest


  • Abe 1
    December 13, 2008

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    ya r amazin babes
    luved it
    gd luck 2 ya
    cheers abe


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    Congratulations on the Silver Cup!!!

    This is one heck of a send-off!!! I really enjoyed reading this poem, and wish you all the best!!! Peace always, xx Cyn


  • luna-midnight gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    wow, i love this, way to go get silver, congrats! and take care, keep it up, with love
    Stephanie ♥


  • styrofoam
    December 13, 2008
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    your cardboard box is fascinating

    love this


  • Dalaney gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    I love to see three of my fav's stack up
    the trophies Wonderfully done - Love, Lane


  • Alyzeh
    December 13, 2008

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    Wow! This one's a winner, ofcourse Like all your other writes! Brilliant take on the prompt!
    All the very best to you Ylova,not that you need it Haha

    Good luck
    Love
    Alyzeh


  • Ken-Maverick
    December 13, 2008

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    Life is full of trash and we can relate to it in so many ways,
    You did really well with this

    All the best to you in the contest

    Ken


  • Jesann gold member
    December 13, 2008
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    I really like this...mmm so many memories are often stored in cardboard boxes !!!
    Well done.


  • Walk-Free
    December 13, 2008

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    you did a beautiful job too.

    your poems never fail to amaze me (: sorry my comments haven't arrived at your doorstep by the truckload, like your have :S

    "Candy-floss colored teddy bears
    hidden in cluttered cupboards,
    diffusing faint scents of your cologne into this empty chamber."

    great job!


  • Noir mariposa...x gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    "Candy-floss colored teddy bears
    hidden in cluttered cupboards,
    diffusing faint scents of your cologne into this empty chamber." << Adored those lines immensely

    A very interesting take on the prompt
    I like your view of it and I thank you for entering

    I wish you luck;
    Claire x


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    This is so perfect for the prompt, I bow down and concede defeat sis, you have the talent in this family!! Love you


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    December 13, 2008
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    Awesome where you went with this.
    Best of wishes!


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    December 13, 2008
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    Writers block my left foot, bring it on, we are going torock this contest sissy

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