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midnight and magnolias

Please don’t take it personally
I slept on the couch again last night.
But I swear it had nothing to do
with you.
I laugh at tv comedy
because it’s not reality.
I stay up late to squeeze out more life
with you.
You pass out  at the commercial break.
I take sleeping pills to simmer down
(what if I over sleep? what if I’m late? what if I just simply can't?)
I know that these fears will all come true
If I crawl in to that bed
with you.
I can’t get up and start my day
when I could be asleep and safe
with you.
God wants me to be safe and warm with you.
Society wants me to be safe and warm with you.
History wants me to be safe and warm with you.

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Prompt #1: the one i am with- i want to write about something that i am dealing with now.

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  • truembrace
    February 1

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    I think many of us have gone through such emotions, but have not had the honesty through our words to put those emotions out there. I imagine the nights that so many go through such emotions with trying to share time and just can't express at all how they are feeling - without worrying about stressing each other out by discussing those emotions and having either person feel as though they are falling short.

    A really solid poem here with much to think about.

    Best of luck in your contest.

    Kim


  • Rheea gold member
    January 7
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    ahh =)