Lips as soft as roses
a touch silky smooth
all the passion of life times forgotten
lovers then and now
so little time to do things right
yet a night when time stands still
he makes her feel like a goddess
wanted above all else
she knows he is the one
to turn things around
with his lips so soft
and that touch of silk
he has become her knight in shining armor
the one to bring her back to life
out of the coma that has held her captive for so long
broken through with a sword of passion
to set free the goddess he sees her to be
A contest entry
- Everything you want! by xxvampyregirlxx.
490 points, ended December 20, 2008, 28 entries
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Comments
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I love the imagery, the similes and the poetic devices here. The poem is short, but not too short that it leaves you without a sense of fulfillment.
"broken through with a sword of passion
to set free the goddess he sees her to be"
I love this, it's the perfect ending to such a beautiful and interesting poem.
I wish you the best of luck, and keep writing and improving your poetry. ^__^
Aeris Silverlight
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Thank you for entering.
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Really intresting write. I love it ^-^
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