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Mairéad’s Murder Mart

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A dark and desolate, oily street
in a dimly-lit part of town
gave home to a girl of flaming hair
shadows offer their deadly wares

yet, off she strolls to pick up snacks
at the paint-chipped, pock-marked building that
is home to constant homicides- sirens wailing late outside-

two am or afternoon-

doesn’t matter when…

Mairéad makes her way each day
to the crumbling, struggling establishment
zoned in heavy industry
vacant lots, asphalt thick
reflecting gunshot echoes loud
casings left upon the ground- find their way to a necklace, 'round

young Mairéad’s pale, sun-starved neck…

“The Murder Mart,” the townsfolk say

as Mairéad passes, the townsfolk pray
she makes it safely home again

before the streetlamp's reddish glow
signals another nightly show…

 

 

 

She found him laying on his side
gunshot wounds oozing wide

thirteen stab wounds to his eye

not a pretty site to see,
Mairéad inspects him casually…

 

“You’re the thirteenth guy this week”
she said, wiping off his cheek,

she placed his eyeball in a cup

telling him that, with lesser luck,

she’d have both his eyeballs red
in the jar beside her bed…

 

He thanked her for the comforting thought;

-said "she was most beautifully wrought,"

that "it was getting cold outside"

and "darker, darker," then he died…

Each day young Mairéad, skipping down
the cracking, buckling concrete walk
goes to the local Murder Mart
merry on her way.

 

 

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  • JWGoethe
    December 13, 2008

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    brings to mind a junkie shuffling off to the local crack house....There's a red house over yonder, and that's where my baby goes...


    • wbiro gold member
      December 14, 2008
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      ohhhhh that reply bespeaks of more your experiences... may I suggest moving to a different neighborhood... lol

  • holic07
    December 13, 2008

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    I really like this poem i have so many different things that are running through my head. There are so many ways you could have conintued it into being but instead you left me hanging wondering if there is anymore than that. I love it. But i am a dark inspired writer these days.

    • wbiro gold member
      December 14, 2008
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      yes, sometimes we must give vent to our morbidity... Thanks... any more coming... well, it is a life and times piece, so who knows...!


  • RT KatPat
    December 13, 2008

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    what a gripping poem.. and how does Mairéad keep her calm through all this mayhem? Beats me completly... But good for her.
    The eye opener for me was
    "You’re the thirteenth guy this week”
    The details of the murder mart etc are nicely done.
    Not a fan of dark poems, i happily went through this one.


    • wbiro gold member
      December 13, 2008
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      thanks, this was a character piece for sure...

  • soulseer
    December 13, 2008

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    intersesting little poem
    kind of reminded me of little shop of horrors or something to that affect. good write cute little story


    • wbiro gold member
      December 13, 2008
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      thanks- never underestimate the power of cute...


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    December 13, 2008
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    Dark and deadly poetry. A pleasure to read. Great job.

    Mike


    • wbiro gold member
      December 13, 2008
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      thanks, nothing like a unswervingly positive character to help us see sunshine in the rain... lol


  • lilblueeyesmine1978
    December 13, 2008

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    THe pictures look like South Park. Cool write. Thanks for sharing. I hope to read more from you. This has so much emotion and the reference to the building and it's delapidated state casts a cool picture in the mind's eye.

    • wbiro gold member
      December 13, 2008
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      I hope the emotion you detected was the irrepressible positiveness of the character despite her surroundings, and not too much her becoming a bit too morbidly jaded by it all... thanks much...


  • Random Goldfish gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    You called me sun-starved? Hahahaha! Why does the murderer have a fiddle?
    After laughing uncontrollably, I'm running 15 minutes late!
    Anyway, the poem is great, especially because I could set it so well in my head being about my hometown and all. But it really is wonderful with imagery and flow. The way the rhythm sounds so merry makes it more morbid.

    Oh, and the last thing I would do to a bloody dead guy is wipe his cheek! Eww!


    Síochán leat
    ~Mairéad~

    • wbiro gold member
      December 13, 2008
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      so you're okay with eyeballs in a jar, then... I knew it! Well, if you keep telling me stories, I'll have my life and times book finished before Christmas...

      and yes, I had to reconstruct the South Park version of you... lucky I had to, I discovered the site and got to create a member of the local rif raf, too... (initially it was suppose to be me...)


  • Have left the stage gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    a visual supportive write to which my attention is abundantly clear on the verbal piece in the middle.
    Very much like the, 'Merchant of Venice', in make up, and a heap of praise on you for bringing a visual of modern day precincts, I feel. You have to beware. plus you summed it up with dark and desolate. Dark for all the insightfully creepy segments in this piece, and of course, the desolate somehow in, although it has presence, you make this your very own observation for us to share. Lovely work.

    • wbiro gold member
      December 13, 2008
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      lol yes, I still get use out of my ancient graphics program, and hey, the ink is free, so why not try to create a complete work of art! This one was beyond an accompanying musical score, however... not familiar with the Merchant of Venice, other than looking askance at it for decades, gathering bits and pieces about it here and there... I think I know more history than art, however... thanks for the look...


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    December 13, 2008

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    Excellent

    A rather unique view of life in the big city. You expressed yourself quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us.


  • FaerieNWonderland
    December 12, 2008

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    LoL i loved this.
    the pictures are great!
    i love the flow, you wrote this so beautifully.
    i enjoyed so much reading this, thanks so much for sharing


    • wbiro gold member
      December 12, 2008
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      lol thanks for the obeisance...

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