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Darkening Path

I am Jack's darkening path.
Behind me crumbles the past
as the future beckons me on.

I tremble upon the abyss.
Dizzy staggering faltering,
somehow I keep forging along.

I've taken the wrong road.
I'm lost and uncertain;
who is this empty shell?

I am Jack's simulacrum,
and I dance to another's tune,
while I hang from the strings at my back.

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  • suzume
    December 14, 2008

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    Thanks for introducing me to a new vocab word. The last stanza - definitely the strongest in my view. Very strong.

    Thanks for entering.


  • Amber Lee
    December 12, 2008
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    Hey I really like this.Well done.