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For you I still care (Non judging poem)

 

To love man or woman I believe is not wrong

and were only human having a right to belong.

Years later some still face hatred day after day

with the foul and rude things that so many say.

 

Worlds fate for mankind shall lie in Gods hand

what is it going to take for us all to understand?

 

We are made up of only but ~Flesh and blood

yet small minded critiques putting life thru mud.

Government officials set in their idealistic ways

while expecting us to live by old country clichés.

 

Doors shut tight from a simple misguided word

such as HIV or AIDS which is absolutely absurd.

 

We are made equal with a personal road to seek

does that make us different or a unworthy freak?

Compassion should not die in anyone’s heart

for the beauty of a human is a great work of art!

 

To hurt or bash any type of life is mean and cruel

completely unacceptable and makes us the fool.

 

The gift of life is precious that God gives to us all

he is our one and only judge to make that call.

Every opinion is important in this world we share

yes even "Mine" my friend, ...for you I still care!

 

 

Author notes

I did not put any pictures or fancy script, hoping to paint a vivid picture with my words.  I myself am heterosexual, but feel every living creature has a right to live as they see fit. And to discriminate or harm another for any reason is completely unacceptable. A very, very good friend of mine is gay and has been for all the years I've known him, woderful man. I hope my words don't insult or harm anyone, for not one word is meant too!

 

This poem is written with pride & respect for;

 International World AIDS Day 2008

 

 

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  • lordoftherings gold member
    January 24

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    I really love what you have penned here. My idea would be to get it published because it is a rallying call to end not only homophobia, but AIDSphobia and discrimination. perhaps after reading this after the outcome of the US election makes me believe again tin the power of the pen. Your comments in your author's notes should make us all stand up and rally with you. Thank you so much for this perfectly penned cry and entering this contest.

    Gregg


  • cheerleader
    December 17, 2008

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    That was probably the best poem I’ve read so far in the contest, you did a great job. The rhyming was really good! If your looking to change anything though, the sentence with the phrase “which I think is totally absurd.” Doesn’t really fit with the rest of the poem with the use of the “I”, but it sounds good in the last sentence of the poem. Other then that though, it’s an amazing poem!!
    I’m in the contest also, and if you win it would not be a surprise, you did good at emphasizing the point of the contest. So yeah, good job again!


    • getsbetter
      December 17, 2008
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      Thank you cheerleader for your xlnt input. I knew I had to go over it afew more times because some things just didn't quite fit. But, I finally finished it and yes took your advice on that. Again, thank you friend...GETS


  • Shakes-spear
    December 13, 2008

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    Great start!

    I don't know what you want to say here, but what you already have said is great. I believe that it is God's call on the issues even if it is our choice. God decides the outcome, we just show if we are worthy! Good to read your work bro. The Shaker