There is a story in these walls,
This dusty basement, freezing den.
What people walked these creeking halls,
This kitchen, bathroom, bedroom, then?
Who used to clean these clouded panes
Now covered by the brush outside?
Who's water wet these bone dry drains?
I'm sure they smiled. I'm sure they cried.
I'm sure their lives were plain as ours
At least until that fateful day;
They left this house to higher powers.
I wonder why they went away
And left these rooms to gather dust
(A glimpse into the days gone by),
The wood to rot, the metals rust.
Did they go broke? Just move? Or die?
It stands upon a windy hill,
It's windows looking down at me.
But no one's at the window sill -
At least no soul that I can see...
But it is not a haunted place,
Just what remains of someone's past
Whose tale I wish I could retrace
But I suspect this wish will last.
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Love the 'vision' of an empty house & who used to live there.
nostalgic
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This is an amazing poem. I believe that people who live in places leave an energy behind. If you you are sensitive enough sometimes you can pick up on that energy and imagine what they might have been like. great job on this beautifully written piece!
Love & Light
Debbera
Sorry I was so late in commenting...
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Frodofan, This is a brilliant poem, exploring the histories and happenings of an abandoned house. Your vision and imagery are well done, write on my Bandit friend. 
You have been Spotlighted by your Poetic Bandit Family today because WE CARE!
Brother Dennis
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All the questions you would ask when you walk into a deserted house, you have brought it all to life through your poem.
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I do often wonder why houses are abandoned and turn into ruins. This evokes one of those houses; almost like a guided tour. Excellent stuff.
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Ah...this is delightful!
Such a pleasure to read and to imagine, along with you, who filled that house and those rooms once...
Just a coupleof quickie-fix-it typos:
Who's (Whose) water wet these bone dry drains?
It's (its) windows looking down at me.
Lovely job, dear Poet ~ and enjoy your day to shine in our Bandit spotlight!
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an absolutely amazing poem... so well written and like Rooms without doors said... it flows without any apparant effort... The last stanza has to be one of my favourites... I am reminded of something that that I have written before... one of my very early poems... I think it was called "Past" lol. It's so in depth, so much energy has gone into this and it has come out amazing...
Well done.
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An excellent poem with effortless flow and strong rhyme throughout. I liked your choice of language and the way you told the story. Empy houses can be fascinating places and you always wonder what happened. Thank you for posting.
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Wowzers ~
This is incredibly powerful, the flow of rhyme is flawless as the imagery captures my eyes and imagaination
Just perfect!
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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I agree... This poem is remarkable and is certainly a write you can be proud of. I like the imagery and metaphors very, very much. Inspired by your writing!
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A delectable poem! As I read each line I was flooded with admiration and even got chills from the profound humanity of this poem you penned. 
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This is really interesting!
It's intriguing, the imagery draws you in and you can create this whole story in your head without your telling it. Which is awesome.
Shari
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BANDITS UNITED: This is your day in the spotlight. Enjoy. Liked the rhythm rhyme, flow of this poem. Made interesting reading.
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Thanks.
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Great story poem that reads smoothly with great content, flow, timing & rhyming! Loved your word choice & visual presentation that drew me right in! Bravo for this. I enjoyed it 'muchly'! Like reading a short story in video print!
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Fine rhythm, rhyme, and images breathe life in this poem.
A worthy subject. Well done!
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Thank you.
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This is incredibly good, Fro! It reads smoothly with great rhythm and rhyme plus tells us a story about an old abandoned house, leaving only the questions we all might have asked were we to walk through its rickety halls. Very well done, poetess!
Much luv & hugs, BonnieQ
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Houss have personalities from the people who have lived within them. The memories and the milestones that each generation has lived make the house seem alive. -
What a beautiful poem, I love the tracing feel of it, the wonder, the splendor, enchanting. The soft tones grive this poem a lush life. Excellent work!
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Is this that abandoned home you take me by on occasion?
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A highly evocative and most haunting piece of poetry, the sort that sticks in the memory long after it is read... most excellent indeed!!!
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How perfectly fascinating. I love the turns this took, the thoughts and questions. I could see it all in my mind so clearly. It's not spooky, but it has that mysterious taste of the unknown. Superb! Very well done. Blessed be.
S
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Oh. This is an interesting poem that you have penned in here. I liked how you looked at something like this old house and allowed us to listen to your thoughts as you kind of just wondered out loud about its history. I think people love the attraction of a mystery, like the things that are abandoned or left undone. It makes us curious to what could have been. I thought you did a good job of expressing yourself here.
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i like this! the rhyme in the last line of the first stanza sounds a little forced, but other than that is well done. nice write!
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