I remember before I met you.
I could breathe, I could feel, I could laugh.
Smiling was something I did everyday.
Coloring . . . I used to color.
Life was beautiful, and I noticed every gorgeous feature of the World,
and couldn't help but open my heart up to anyone.
Listen . . . I used to listen.
Then I met you, and I stopped.
Nothing was the same anymore.
For awhile, I thought I was happy.
I forgot how to smile, I forgot how to laugh.
I stopped coloring and started crying.
It was like a part of me had died.
But now I'm okay.
I'm happy, and I have no one to thank but myself.
You're out of my life, sugar, and now I can breathe again.
Author notes
Wow. This is the first thing I have written since high school, and I'm in my second year of college.
Sorry if it totally sucks. I've kinda gone through something like what you explained, so I thought I could write something out for you.
Sorry that it's really not that good, I have written way better. I'm sorry =[
A contest entry
- I don't know what to think anymore. by ninja girl 418.
850 points, ended December 30, 2008, 46 entries
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Comments
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Oh, don't apologize! The emotion was well-expressed, and people love a happy ending.
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this definately does not suck, in fact it is a very good write that is filled with emotion and makes a very good read, keep up the good work and thank you for sharing
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Amazing.
this was amazing. i really loved it. it's very much what i'm going through as well. but i haven't yet been able to make myself happy.
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