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Painful Waiting

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The pain in your eyes
Is too hard to bear

The sadness on your face
Leaves me broken and torn

Your impenetrable walls surround you
And I,
Futilely,
Attempt to break them down

The confusion flooding your mind
Overwhelms you

The dismay in your thoughts
Drowns you

But I,
I can't help but wonder...

What consumes you so completely,
You can't see me

Waiting...

           ...Waiting

By your side?

Author notes

So...I haven't written a poem in what seems like month (and probably is months) If my muse is slow on the uptake...sorry bout that...

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  • StarIlluminated
    December 14, 2008

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    Great Poem Katrina!! I can kind of relate to it...in a way...anyway it was really beautifully worded and flowed nicely.


  • checkmate-
    December 13, 2008

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    Great job I don't think I've written a poem in months either.... Anywho, good job.

    -Paradox


    • liduen silver member
      December 14, 2008
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      I suppose Paradox is a good way to shorten your name...but I still like Oxy better

      Anyways, thanks for the comment!


  • Miss Chievous
    December 13, 2008
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    That was great! Im not sure how to say what i feel but it was wonderful!

  • Black-Fang
    December 12, 2008

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    i really like this, it leaves the reader wondering too and feeling the anguish of the writier
    the form is good, it suits the poem
    keep writing

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