It's quite awkward
That I should like you
But words won't escape
My evermoving mouth
I'm so tired now
My eyes have been
Drooping for so long
So let me in
I'm banging at your door
Just let me in
You just can't be
The master of all things
It isn't right
For either of us
Now some music
Plays in the background
Like a neverstopping record
So let me in
I'm banging at your door just let me in
The words break
all my locked chains
& you sing them
so beautifully
A tear sheds
At these last words
So let me in
Author notes
1) The most salty tears are those shed on those who don't deserve them -- Hikari lady
i wrote this a while back, it was one of my first attempts at free verse. 
HOPE YOU ENJOY
A contest entry
- 10 quotes to inspire you contest by Hikari Lady.
700 points, ended December 27, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very nice write...specially:
So let me in
I'm banging at your door
Just let me in
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Truely heartfelt. I loved how you stated your emotions and this goes with the quote very well. Thanks for sharing I indeed enjoyed the read.
Good luck in the contest.
~Noor -
This is a great attempt at free verse, I was very impressed. Thank you for sharing!
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Excellent
Ah, methinks 'tis a poignant write, indeed. You have expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
this is awesome writing. the reader can tell that these words comes straight from your heart.
great job poet!!
SilverButterfly
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