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Paper Hopes


Crackled feather descends
Sculpting rust routes
on tapered grounds
Swaying through summer winds
-snowflakes in September-

With the fall of this leaf
A new day had begun..

This landing promised growth
Giving birth to a new tree

[to new beginnings]

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: Tissue
30 to 40 words

Photo Credits: http://abdullahcoskun.deviantart.com/art/leaf-53145448

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  • Meroza
    February 6
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    I adore your take on the prompt, shows such creativity, and emotions as well. Brilliant.

    Take care of yourself


  • Dalaney gold member
    February 4

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    i enjoyed this write very much.  i like having so much time to finally hunker down and read some of the best poets on this site   Love, Lane


  • letters to no one
    January 9

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    Thank you for entering this into my contest, it is such a light-hearted read, it's full of hope.

    I'm sorry for not commenting until now, I hope that "better late than never" is your motto.

    Shelly
    x

  • Virginia Logsdon
    December 31, 2008
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    Very nicely done.I really got the feel of it!


  • Ken-Maverick
    December 25, 2008

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    Ooooh, you got a "just lovely" from Heidi hahaha.
    Well done on this and all the best to you in the contest

    Ken


  • Celtic Legend
    December 21, 2008
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    great job! this is really well done. i was captivated by your words.


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    December 20, 2008

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    Definately colouring well outside the lines here, barely to do with the prompt but definately a beautiful interpretation. Best to you in the contest

  • dx d by me
    December 20, 2008

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    Lovely poem, however, beginning with "with the fall of this leaf..." This soars, beyond poetic and takes upon itself, a profound weight. Beginnings, from death they spring! Incredible finish! Bravo! Geo


  • Ademon
    December 20, 2008

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    This was a great read and very true to the soul, I wish you the best of luck in this contest! You truly have a way with words!


  • SabaSophiya
    December 20, 2008

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    Very well-executed and sharp! The choice of words is excellent! Nice job. Thanks for sharing!! God bless!!


  • Jesann gold member
    December 19, 2008
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    Very creative and beautifully worded.
    Wonderful imagery throughout
    I love it.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    December 19, 2008

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    Flows so smoothly, painting a beautiful picture as it goes. Love the hopeful ending, very neat read. Good luck


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 18, 2008

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    kind of curious, i like it, you did a great job on this poem keep it flowing and good luck in the contest.


  • Joseph Hollis
    December 18, 2008

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    Very creative. You've had some wonderful writes lately. The alliteration at the beginning is a very nice touch. Best of luck!


  • Meroza
    December 18, 2008

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    This is such a beautiful write, I adore the image you have used to express yourself and to bring your words to life.

    Well done and best of luck!


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    December 17, 2008

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    I love this Liz...! snowflakes in September.... so thought provoking!.... I hope you win with this... the imagery was fantastic!

    becca


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    December 17, 2008

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    Nicely done dear, with powerful diction as well.

    All the best,
    mj.


  • Grunts Girl gold member
    December 16, 2008
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    this was just lovely


  • chilali
    December 16, 2008

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    A stunning piece Liz! Well done! I love this. I know Sam will love this as well. Good luck to you in the contest love

    Best wishes,
    Ylova


  • thejollytinker
    December 15, 2008
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    I love the Genesis aspect- this is good stuff, young lady. G


  • maralisa silver member
    December 13, 2008
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    will come back to visit when your muse revives

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