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Killing Spree

It's a jubilation;
A killing spree
Kill one human
Get killed free.

It's a celebration
The beast is freed
Slit their throats
And watch them bleed
Feed your bloodlust
And take your shot
It's yours to own
Your bullet bought.

Murder, manslaughter
Just a part of the game
Come to the killing spree
And win your fame.

Shoot them all
Straight in the eye
Slit a child's throat
Watch him die
Put an arrow
Through your best friend
Survival of the fittest
And it'll never end.

Courage and bravery
Don't mean a thing
When you stare death in the face
Your heart won't sing.

Cuffed and locked up
Against your own will
Killed all those people
Just for the thrill.

The adrenaline rush
Is so very bittersweet
As you dine upon
The last meal you'll EVER eat.

Finally, they push and shove you
Through open steel doors
Up ahead are the gallows
Which one should abhor.

They slip the rope on
You take your last breath
As the floor drops out
Your neck sounds your death.

-12/10/08

Author notes

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I read the rules, but i don't know what i would name a pet parrot XD

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AP X Factor
Username: XxYoru-OkamixX
First name [or name you will like to go by that is not your username]: Desha
Age: 15 1/2
General poetic style: Dark
Why you’re interested in this contest: I want to show people that i am a good poet.
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The Dark Call Has Sounded
My name is Desha.

A contest entry

*awaits the critics*

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Comments

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  • Symphony
    March 28

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    Wow, yikes, this was long and kept going at a furious pace, I wasn't quite sure what to expect when I opened it, but certainly not this -

    I have to admit that I enjoyed the opening and closing stanzas the best, they seemedf hte 'strongest' and most hard hitting to me!

    Thanks for entering


  • DogTagz-TheJalapeno
    January 13
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    I loved this. Like I adored this. Good luck on the contest, not that you need it.


  • Daisy Ballerina
    January 6
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    Very gruesome...

    Very good!


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    January 6
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    awesome write!


  • Kathraina silver member
    January 3

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    A very dark write...well penned, the rhyme is superb. Great job and good luck in the contest.

    ♥ Kathraina


  • Shrat
    January 1

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    Woah. This is the first time a poem has disturbed me. It didn't disturb me a whole lot, but more than one ever has. Great job with that, because I didn't think that was possible. I really liked the rhyme, andtanks for reading and following the rules. Overall, great job. Good luck in the contest.


  • SheWasPreternatural
    December 28, 2008

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    this was really dark and cynically disturbing. a massacre was painted very vividly here... but as a young mother of a son i did not at all approve of stanza 4- to me there is a difference between vengeful killing and vanity killing. Children being killed for fun is an obscene and sickening idea- innocence such as a child's in a bloodbath is just absurd... if anyone tried to slit my son's throat for kicks, well they wouldn't get far enough to touch him before THEY bled to death. it also lacked imagery and metaphor as i had specified. all in all this was well written and your dark flair shined here. thank you for sharing. -T


  • XorangejuiceX
    December 24, 2008

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    WOAH!!!! my face looked like this from like the first line until the end
    O.O
    well thats not really a wonderful picture but
    this was...awesome crazy! lol
    i cant think of words to explain this


  • BadazzGangsta
    December 13, 2008

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    damn desha...lol...u got a hell of a dark side to ya...but i loved this poem...good work...keep it up...hehehe n go comment mine to ..lol..pwease!! ttyl girly


  • sucks2beyou712
    December 12, 2008
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    i really like the beet of this very nice and word choice just very good


  • Anthony0230
    December 12, 2008

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    AMAZING!!!

    As said the imagery is amazing its a great poem and has great detail and darkness....Dude, Big thumbs up....


  • new born
    December 12, 2008

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    WOW this is so spooky.
    'As the floor drops out
    Your neck sounds your death.'
    Oh my fawking god...(excuse my french)
    This is just incredible. Morbid, yes, but still incredible. The imagery was intense, and the wording was kind of scary. (in a good way) The best poems come when you're bored during class, or so it seems...Great job!

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