Once there was a boy,
the world on his back.
He ran holding
hands with the wind.
Childhood dreams,
Ghostbusters toys
were all that collected
in his mind.
Flintstone vitamins,
schoolyard scars,
Were all he wished
to avoid.
Cubby little child,
with little Debbie
stored away. He never
thought past beyond present.
But over time,
he grew tired and
the world grew
heavier upon his back.
Under its weight,
he stop running.
His dreams soon
lost way to nightmares.
He was changing
and soon it was time
for that boy
to be put to rest.
As I watched that boy,
fall to the night,
I could smile
and say to him,
so long and goodnight.
Author notes
The picture is a young version of me... i was cute, what happened?
this is really for me, to that child i left behind somewhere in the back of my mind, and i still have those Ghostbusters and other toys on the bed stored away, and i still think those Vitamins tasted like chalk, honestly, lol. but this is my poem for what i used to be from what i am today. i wonderful i changed that much
i do plan to edit so any and all advise is welcome, or just drop a line and tell me what you think
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This was nice looking back at yourself. When you take the time to look at what you were and where you are it can help you move fowerd some tims. Nice work with this the flow was very nice SH
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esp liked
Once there was a boy,
the world on his back.
He ran holding
hands with the wind.
Childhood dreams,
...
in his mind.
Flintstone vitamins,
schoolyard scars,
Cubby little child,
with little Debbie
stored away.
over time,
he grew tired ..
the world grew
heavier ..
Under its weight,
he stop running.
..dreams
soon
lost .. to nightmares.
..changing
and
.. put to rest.
..
fall to the night,
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I really like this poem, it reminds me of how some people can live carefree lives until they reach a higher age and then fell as if everyone is depending on them
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something lovely about this aaron- I did wonder whether cubby was supposed to be chubby but i liked it as is anyway
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The poem as a whole is pretty good. Not a total masterpiece, like some of the other work of yours that I adore, but decently written. The flow is pretty smooth throughout, and no craptastical language, so that's great.
I love that it's personal, and love even more that it comes with a pic! And I'm sure you're still as cute, although... it would be hard to get any cuter! -
How cute
This is quiet lovely. I like the fact that you can honestly look back in your past and over view what you've become. It's sweet and yet kind of sad at the same time because somewhere deep down you are still that little kid that didn't have a care in the world but now you are a man that has grown up. Thanks for sharing Aaron... Kahy -
At some point we all have to put our childish self behind, or well, I still haven't fully
But at one point we all grow up and become adults. Some becomes adults in harmony with they're inner child, some don't.
This is a powerfull poem and well spoken. Don't let the world crush you, for it is made for your steps.
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this is really cute and sweet keep em up doll ..xxpixi
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You were cute! Your inner child will always be with you, and I hope you let him play, and listen to his wisdom.
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Awww what a cutie! A big smiles....tho no wonder surrounded by all those goodies
The magic of childhood is something we all loose, mores the pity! Still there is magic to be found in adulthood to 
Very neat read hunni 
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aw, you were so cute!
We all miss the good old days -
aww I remember thise days. such a good write. very emotional I loved it keep up the good work. this was very well pen'd
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you know what? somewhere down inside
he's still there playing with his toys and thanking
you for not giving him Flintstone vitamins
Love, Lane
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wow....this is so deep and magnificant
i hope this was nice to write for you
take care. Stephanie
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Outstanding job! This really touched me, never having had a real childhood and all my toys were thrown out by my mother so all I have are memories. And by the way, the cute comment? I don't know what you look like today, but I am sure you are still very cute, just remember personalities are everything and we are each beautiful in our own way! Thank you for sharing this with me
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Awesome - Love it!!!
This is a very heart-warming poem, I hope it was therapeutically healing for the inner child... Much food for thought here, as we all cross that place on the road to adulthood; contemplating the now, the future, and the unknown... Who we once were is no longer there - as we struggle with our own self-discovery. Thank you for sharing your heart-and-soul-felt poem with all of us!!!
Peace, love & hugs always, xx Cyn xx 
P.S. Always be kind to your inner child!!!
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Aaron this is so great and something I know so many of us can relate to. We all carry memories of who we once were. Our past is something that we can never leave behind. Especially, when there are so many wonderful memories and beautiful times. Wonderful work here my friend and I thank you for sending this one my way! It's great to read and learn more about you. Take care!
Jeremy0826
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I really enjoyed reading this poem that you've written.. I sent you the suggestions that I had. we all grow up at some point in our lives. we change.. and who is to say that you aren't cute anymore?, or more like handsome. and yes those Flintstone Vitamins tasted like chalk, but personally much worse than that.. nothing like that gritty tasting feeling on ones tongue...
thank you for sending me the link.
mommy
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We all carry a little person around with us Aaron, and when we try and move away from them, they stay right where they are, until you're ready to find them again.
I think this poem is as sweet as you honey.
Touching, poignant.
Love,
jin
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Awww! Such a cute picture! Yes, you were a very cute child and you still are cute Aaron! I loved reading this poem and finding out more about you. This was great. Thank you for sharing this with me love.
Best wishes,
Ylova
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