Give me nostalgia, any relapse away from now
I long for our early beginnings
Filled with virginity, and bliss
My eyes see a great person,
Adoration radiates off me, and
Love that puppies understand
You feel the entirety of true love
The first girl to complete you
You're my just another boy
Misunderstanding, that's all
I feel strongly for you
Just not as strongly as you
All the things I need you provide
I am willing to give it all back
But I feel the lethargy beginning
Please baby, lead me
Show me how to give you
Everything that you give me
I love you
Author notes
I chose Prompt Number One because I think thoughts along these lines every day, at least once a day. I hope that the flow here is not awkward. I tried to pace this right, but I'm trapped in my own head and feelings at this point and could hardly care if I even get a comment at all from anyone concerning this.
It's all too real.
A contest entry
- Love Me Till The End by Sorrow is the name.
400 points, ended January 8, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think?
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How raw in truth and heart...love is a touchy and confusing place and often we walk on eggshells to find it's depth...sadly it is often one sided or strong for one then the other...don't push yourself just allow yourself time to find it on your own.
Nicely siad.
Best,
mystic
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Thank you very much for the comment! A lot of time has passed since this poem, and I did do what you recommended, even though I just read this comment, and we are still together.
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Hm.
Sadly, this reminds me of a guy I know currently...and I hate to think I'm the narrator. But in a desolate way, it is beautifully chilling. The notions of being certainly almost not certain... Hmm.
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I agree.. it's hard to know that you don't know, but is still comforting to know that the unclarity is at least some kind of clarity. Thank you for reading and commenting!
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I think in a way it makes it even harder. But having the sense of self to realise and admit the reality of being unsure is a noble quality.
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True that yo.
I hope that things get more.. hmm productive in your current relationship for you. Thanks again for reading.
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you love them but not as strongly as you think you should your feelings have faded and your other half is still filled with the passion of the start. you know not what to do because you do not want to break their heart.
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These are very accurate lines! Thank you for reading!
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"Misunderstanding, that's all
I feel strongly for you
Just not as strongly as you"
I love that line.
It sort of shows the longing that's possibly not mutual.
I love it(:
Grat write.
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Thank you for reading and commenting! I hope to read some of your work soon.
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This lover's dilemma is well expressed, with good word choices, and the flow is fine. I think the feeling content is particularly strong, and most of us can identify with this form some experience in our own lives. Well done.
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Thank you! I am glad you could identify. I hope to read your work in the near future, and thank you for taking some time out of your day to read!
~Sarah
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Very true, pure poem that you have written here.... I don't want to write a critical review yet because I want you to get back into writing and posting. Just keep it up and you'll get back to where you were
I haven't read your poetry for a while..... 
Nice choice of words, though, and I love the pureness (like I mentioned earlier) in the poem.... so, so beautiful. Well done, dear! 
--Tim
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Critical review? :D
I cannot handle that truth yet! *sobs*
I feel that I do not have to explain myself to you, nor that my poetry is any less or better then before when I use to write on here.
But thank you for the response. And I would hope it would sound truthful. It was. lol.
Thanks --T.
Hehe, that was me mocking a little bit.. barely.
~Sarah
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A beautiful poem that seems to be filled with so much love and pleading. It is as if you are asking this person to guide you to what is right, what they feel will please them. I loved the metre. It sits quite nicely and was very easy to read with no faultering. I love the title. It says a lot. You have put a great deal of emotion into this write and i congratulate you on the piece. The very best of luck in the contest.
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Thank you for reading! Yes, I am not sure how I feel. Somedays I know for sure that I do truly care and love this boy, but others I feel as if he gives me too much credit and loves more then I. Love is such a fickle word. I am glad you enjoyed it. I hope that we continue to read and write back and forth!
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