With golden threads you spin a net
to capture me in love’s duet,
entwining grace with patient care,
reminding me you’re always there.
Each strand a kiss from silken lips
that spins with tender fingertips
and hides the holes of disrepair,
reminding me you’re always there.
In safe cocoon I feel at peace,
content to rest in pain’s surcease.
Your fragrance lightly fills the air
reminding me you’re always there.
With golden threads you spin a net
reminding me you’re always there.
Author notes
prompt: filigree
A Kyrielle Sonnet consists of 14 lines (three rhyming quatrain stanzas and a non-rhyming couplet). Just like the traditional Kyrielle poem, the Kyrielle Sonnet also has a repeating line or phrase as a refrain (usually appearing as the last line of each stanza). Each line within the Kyrielle Sonnet consists of only eight syllables. Common practice is to use the first and last line of the first quatrain as the ending couplet
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A contest entry
- Filigree by Pamela A Lamppa.
1750 points, ended December 17, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Perfectly executed Kyrielle Sonnet.
Your anchor line is strong and carries the first line to end with the couplet firmly grounded.
Kyrielle is one of my favorite forms for expressing emotion, care and love particularly, which are subjects made for Sonnet. You have combined them well with your interesting word choices.
This is written with a good grasp of language and form and just thrilled me to pieces. Thank you for this delight. Well done. ~Pamela
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I think that the rhythm here is perfect--musical in it's flow. The rhyme is spot on. Again I am impressed by your ability to write in forms. This reads so naturally. The imagery is lovely and moving. I only wish that I could write forms this well. I usually end up pulling my hair out in the attempt.
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Thank you, Brian, for this lovely comment. With the beautiful way you write you have no need to try any other type of poetry. I appreciate this positive comment.
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Liz, this is a great poem you wrote. I love the Kyrielle poems you write. Best of luck in the contest! Sounds golden!
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Thank you, Kelly for reading and offering such a positive comment. I enjoy writing in form because it helps to focus my thoughts. I appreciate this comment.
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wow, that is a lot of wonderful and tender expression in such a structured rhyming poem, the difficulty of this form is apparent ...but here so is the beauty, feelings...so well portrayed here...lovely poetry in rhyme and form...PK
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Thank you PK for reading my poem and offering such a positive comment. Form poetry can be constricting so I am pleased you were moved by the feelings expressed. I appreciate it.
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Lovely!!!
This reminded me of Lady of Shallot for some reason. The romantic essence ensnares the reader's imagination. -
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Thank you for taking the time to read and leave such a positive comment.
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