Voice cracked, soul attacked,
Maiming her pure wellbeing.
Cancer preceding, death ensuing;
Surely she won't last.
Cold and pale, thin and frail,
Demons come to snatch in the night.
Perishing alone, no one else home,
Been alone for far too long.
At last, cancer engulfs her past;
Present and future.
Author notes
This has got internal rhyme, which I'm quite proud of. Yay! Yay me! 
xx
A contest entry
- Pick a word - Write a poem in 10 lines or less (E) by The Fun House.
1050 points, ended December 14, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
This is horrendous. I know. :O Was it really weird?
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I was prepared to comment on this in a favorable light. However after reading this on the page:
"This is horrendous. I know.
Was it really weird?"
It made me feel like I just wasted my time reading it. You should take more pride in your own work, especially when entering a contest. I don't mean to be offensive but I feel quite offended that you would expect me to judge something that you do not like yourself. I'm sorry but I won't consider it seriously if you do not. -
Nice
Short and sweet i like.
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