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Again

It's happening yet again,
Because of him I've lost a friend.
I want to scream, cry, and fight!
To make this wrong turn go right...
But every single thing I do,
Makes you feel like I'm shunning you.
Every time I try to be nice,
It's like my heart turns to ice.
I try to thaw out the problem;
But it seems I can never solve them.
Please tell me what to do,
To show you that I really like you.
I hate it when you're ignoring me,
It tears my heart apart you see.
Please, please help me figure it out;
I know you must be full of doubt,
But I'm not him, can't you see?
I just want you to see me for me.
Please help me figure out what to do,
Because in the end I realize I'm in love with you.

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'My heart is my pen'

HellsxXxAngel

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  • Antebellum
    July 27
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    wow. Packed full of emotion.
    thank you so much for taking the time to enter my contest.
    best of luck to you.


  • emc2
    February 27

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    beautiful work you have written here. it is filled with much emotion and that is very clear. i know that feeling all too well. good luck in the contest.


  • Nicada silver member
    February 11

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    This is an emotion filled write, which is obviously written straight from the heart and soul. You did a great job on this. Thanks so much for entering. Blessings, Patty


  • sanguigno
    February 4

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    ive been there. i hope you got out of that situation. its quite difficult and it kills the heart

    -thanks for entering


  • Mythtress
    January 6

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    Heart felt write. I felt the pain of the poem's speaker and you did a wonderful job of expressing the remorse, regret, and everything else that I think most people go through at least once in their lives. The universal appeal of this poem make it a good one. Write on, poet.

    Blessings,
    Myth


  • ChunkyC
    December 15, 2008

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    This poem is really good. A lot of these ideas and words seem like they might be some of my own. I can relate so well with this.

    *Every time I try to be nice,
    It's like my heart turns to ice.
    I try to thaw out the problem;
    But it seems I can never solve them.*

    I love this metaphor of the "ice". And "thawing" out a problem... that is brilliant! Great job, thanks for entering and good luck.


  • Paloszoo gold member
    December 12, 2008

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    Wow, this is really sad. It's obvious you put your heart and soul into this awesome piece. I hope everything works out for you! Good luck in the contest.

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