So innocent, so pure, each tiny wing expands,
so fast they learn, as they flutter in my hands,
growing with every day, time is passing by
they stretch their little wings, learning how to fly
soon there is no more daddy, they can do it on their own
they are growing so boldly, no longer needing to be shown
life has its dangers, but it's time to let them fly
my little children are growing fast, time is passing by
as their wings are fully grown, they will leave from my side
my little butterflies are now adults, I sit here and cry -
quickly, but happily, time passed me by.
Author notes
My Daughter Peyton Mekenzie, and Son Gabriel Lucas, they are my life and give me more than enough reason to fight to succeed in life...this poem is dedicated to them.
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Beautiful Metaphor
This was such a great piece & write to your children. I don't have any children of my own, but I do have a neice, and I played the roll of baby daddy while vicki was pregnant. I got all the late night food cravings, got to deal with the crazy hormones & mood swings & held the hair in the morning. I was the one that would wake up at midnight & sing & softly talk to Ema (the baby).
She is the most amazing, beautiful & best thing that has ever happened to me & I'm scared that should I ever have my own children I couldn't ove them as much, but that could be me being irrational & thinking waaaaaaay too much.
Your children are lucky to have a father such as yourself!
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Believe it or not, you'd truly be amazed about the love that comes for children and how fast it truly bursts through.... my two are my parents first grand babies...and they fell in love with them in a heart beat, You will be a great mommy I promise just love with your heart and try to be patient as possible...lol God that alone will make you succeed... it's hard but these two keep me on my toes and I love them with all that I am as a man! I know that you will do great when that time comes!
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Touching & Loving Metaphor
You mingle the illusive nature of the butterfly with the disengaging nature of children as they wean themnselves from their nest.
Your need for and love of your two butterflies
is palpable.
Thank you for sharing this joy
until next time
stay
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This was so beautiful and bittersweet. I like how you refer to them as butterflies finding their wings. the ending was very lovely.
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That picture speaks volumes for how you love your kids and the poem is a delight to read, all children need Dad's like you
Just beautiful 
C
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What's sad is that I just got home and I'm ....anyway just now realizing that my poem is a rhyming poem....haha sad
lol
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I wish my dad had been there when i was a kid... in fact wish hed been there at all... this is beautiful, they can grow up knowing they are deeply loved thats for sure. You are a wonderful person.
Laura
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how beautiful... first, the picture is precious.
what a wonderful way to make your thoughts known to your son and daughter one day. i see you have touched alot of people with this one.
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I'm very passionate and protective about the ones that I love and hold close to my heart... thank you for the beautiful comment.
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Stunning.
Oh my gosh, this is soo beautiful.
How sweet!
The ending is soo sad.
Wow, this is amazing.
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OMG SO ADORABLE!
This is so adorable! Such a sweet tribute to your children. They are very beautiful. Such a cute family! Bravo! Great job, and God Bless you guys
♥♥♥ Kathraina
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Beautiful Poem
This was such a delight to read this morning. So full of love and caring. They do growup so fast, I am glad you are enjoying them now. Children bring a lifetime of love and happiness. Thank you for sharing this heartfelt poem. Take care, Sandy
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Lol I was so caught up I forgot to applaud=)
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Very few poems moved me like that. The whole time a smile consumed my face and my eyes were led to water. They are lucky to have a father as loving as you!
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I absolutely love this, when you're old, you'll look back and remember when they were little and think this was the best time of your life, my nephew is there now, I should show him this poem.
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What a dazzingly beautiful dedication to two cute children This is a poem that they will cherish forever, I am sure.
Time is flying by, indeed; thank God that He gives us what we need; and all of Eternity afterward!
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this is beautiful
my wings are almost all grown now but ill never really leave even if i fly away a part of me will always be with Dad and ill fly home as much as i can 
life has its dangers, but it's time to let them fly
my little children are growing fast, time is passing by
this is so true but time is gonna pass by whether there's kids or not so its better when there's kids right?
Lovely poem
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beautiful write
My little girl is my little butterfly
and as she grows I feel a deep sadness with each passing year that goes by.... we look at her and see the beautiful woman shes going to be...
thank you for this amazing write that you have entered into my contest!
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Heh, I truely hope your children grow up and tear up as they reads this, and feel the same about their children, very moving, made me think of my papa.
And my mother took a "parenting" glass before my older sister was born (back when they were offering them) and she got a card that told her the two most important thing you can give your child is 1) Love and 2) Wings .... Im glad you grasp that so innocently but so profoundly as well.
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I think it is delightful. All the best with it in this contest.
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Thank you I think time is truly precious especially when you are watching your own children grow up...before you know it they're adults.
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The relationship between a father and their children can be a beautiful thing.. Makes me wish I had had that kind of connection with my dad. Oh well, the past is the past and it can't be changed. This is a lovely poem. It made me realize that my daughter isn't going to stay tiny forever. Keep on writing!
~Faith
P.S. Your kids are so cute!! I hope my daughter grows up to be as beautiful as your little girl.
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I think this is fantastically written and the pic adds heart to it. You guys look like your having a blast. This is a beautiful poem.
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i love the idea/metaphor for your children as butterflies, and it goes so well with the pic, they are gorgeous..and they will always call you daddy, i feel..lol
some critique:
- i would left align this poem, it is very hard to read with it centered.
- i think a few line breaks would enhance this piece.
- watch your use of 'ing' words, ei. stretching, needing, learning, growing, passing...it is sometimes better to write with the active verbs....
i like to edit poems, so i'll send you an example of how i would edit this piece in an im....please give me a couple days to get back to you....
thanks for the lovely compliment in my guestbook..i'm happy you like my poetry, please feel free to send me poems of yours any time=)
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SO DEEPLY TOUCHING!!!
It is a beautiful thing to watch your children grow up and face the world, and you can be sure of they will still call you daddy.
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I love this so cute! Oh I love that pic. I live in Omaha so I know where exactly that is. Really great poem!
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so sweet. I can tell your kids are your world. I hope to one day understand that kind of love.
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Aww.. this is all just too sweet.
i love the picture =] everyone looks so happy!
and what a beautiful poem, so full of love and emotion. i like these lines :
their minds are as sponge
Growing with every day
it's like something my mum would say.
and your kids will always call you daddy!! i still call my dad daddy and i'm almost 17!!
ElectricBloom
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Thank you for that...Being a "new" daddy per-say I can't imagine my little one's growing up as fast as they already are and it truly scares me sometimes to know that soon, this person that could fix anything for them with just a hug and smile...is going to be un-cool or worse there will be a gap/void between them and I. It's comforting to know that some bonds hold through and through. thank you!
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