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Dark Intentions

 

A million silken folds of crimson rose petals,
her name etched upon cobalt skies
yet his love remains unrequited.

A drunken laugh fills the air while his nerves ignite and  angry blood begins to rush.

 

His dangerous obsession; exposed.
Dark intentions, of her body buried in veils of desert sands; revealed....

 

Colors explode into black and white, frightening her aura of candied perfumes.

Author notes

Prompt: Obsession; it's not there to control you, it's there to slip you up.

 

7 lines

 

Picture Credit: http://ravennae.deviantart.com/art/Cruel-intentions-after-dark-29704974

I love putting up pictures with my poetry and this one seemed to go best.  The prompt was very challenging. I tried. I hope you like it Snookums.

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  • awannabepoet
    July 26

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    This shows where so many men have shown the weakness that is so systemic to humanity and in most cases the males.

    Excellent poem.

  • InBetweenThoughts
    December 13, 2008

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    Good morning Ylova Congratulations on your Award. This was a wonderful write off the prompt given. I love where you have taken this, well thought and penned. Thank you for sharing, have a beautiful day, Ken IBT


  • maralisa silver member
    December 13, 2008
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    a wonderful take onthe promt very dark and powerful congratulations on your shiny maralisa


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    Oh so dark here, it reminds me of a stalker. Where you never can quite tell what they'll do next. Stunning hun, Congratulations on the HM


  • Merry Christmas
    December 12, 2008

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    A very good poem. You used the word obsession though, for me it would've been so much better if you'd not used that word and had found a better alternative for it. But it still worked like that, especially with your take on it.

    Thanks for entering and being patient


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 12, 2008

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    this is something good that is all i can think to say on this one, but then again dark writes just get something inside me going and it hard to stop once it is out there, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Paloszoo gold member
    December 12, 2008

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    Dark intentions of her body buried in veils of desert sands; revealed....

    Love that line. Very creepy. This is an excellent piece, which I really enjoyed. Evoked a lot of emotion in me! Well done!


  • go away.
    December 12, 2008
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    Yup; you're going to defeat me.


  • Hikari Lady
    December 12, 2008

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    eeeK!! I knew you'd blow mine away since yours is perfect and mine is meh from the start. xD
    This is a great take on the prompt, Ylova. Really loved the dark feeling. Good luck, dear.

    Love&Peace
    ~Noor

  • ElectricBloom
    December 12, 2008

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    a very interesting take on the prompt!!
    i really like it, beautifully dark and dripping with imagery - good qualities in a poem!!
    i also really like the picture you've put with this - it does fit rather well.

    best of luck in the contest!!

    ElectricBloom


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    December 12, 2008
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    I came to see who you were calling Snookums.. and it's someone called Snookums. lol


    • Kari gold member
      December 12, 2008
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      Mark, I am doing the same thing

      Good luck. I know you'll do great ylova

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