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Bedeviled

Thoughts, compulsive desires,
overwhelming urges.
An addiction.
Eating away within ones head,
calling, creating unsound choices.
The gambler, highs, lows,
Jackpot, or not!

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Prompt; Obsession; it's not there to control you, it's there to slip you up.

A contest entry

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  • Metalqueen
    December 13, 2008
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    Very strong and vivid write. Congrats on the win.

    • InBetweenThoughts
      December 13, 2008
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      Good evening Metalqueen Thank you so much for your wonderful thoughts and applauses! Really glad you enjoyed this. Have a beautiful day, Ken IBT

  • A peine Ici
    December 12, 2008

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    Thank you, thank you, thank you! You found a way to relay the word obsession and the feeling of it without actually using the word. I also like the way you related it to gambling.

    Thanks for entering and being patient
    • InBetweenThoughts
      December 13, 2008
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      Good morning Snookums thank you so much for the golden award! It has made my morning that much more beautiful after getting off the graveyard shift At first the prompt kind of caught me off guard, but with some thought this is what became of it. Glad it pleased you enough to award it with the Gold. Thank you again have a lovely day, Ken IBT
  • Lady Dragonwyck
    December 12, 2008

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    oh, the sweet sin of obsession

    Ken, I do believe you summed up obsession very creatively. Oh, yes.........the sweet sin of obsession and it's downside.
    Good luck in the contest.

    Lady D

    • InBetweenThoughts
      December 13, 2008
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      Good morning Lady D thank you for your wonderful comments and applauses! It was a prompt to really think of before writing, but it turned Golden! Thank you again, have a beautiful day! Ken IBT
  • ElectricBloom
    December 12, 2008

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    an interesting take on the prompt, i like it!
    excellent word choice, a short and powerful poem.
    very strong opening and ending lines. the opening line pulled me into the poem, and the ending like is a strong finnish, and i like the exclamation mark!

    best of luck in the contest!!

    ElectricBloom

    • InBetweenThoughts
      December 12, 2008
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      Hello ElectricBloom Thank you for your wonderful comments and applauses on my poetry. The prompt was different and wasn't really sure of what to write at first Glad you enjoyed. Have a lovely day, Ken IBT
  • Ylova silver member
    December 12, 2008

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    A very interesting take on the prompt. Good luck to you in the contest

    Much love
    Ylova

    • InBetweenThoughts
      December 12, 2008
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      Good morning Ylova Thank you for commenting and applauding my poem. So glad you enjoyed this. Much appreciated, have a lovely day, Ken IBT
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