Her wrinkled hands
lay motionless by her side.
Blinking she reaches out;
touching, needing reassurance
from the murky water.
Sighing softly, this was just
another cycle to be untied.
Author notes
Prompt -- Obsession; it's not there to control you, it's there to slip you up.
The girl is OCD with washing her hands if anyone's confused
A contest entry
- Quickie.... by Merry Christmas.
460 points, ended December 12, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I like this, it relates to the prompt quite well and is a more direct take but what you've chosen and gone with words and that's what matters.
Thanks for entering and being patient -
i loved it!
this is such a stunning write. the imagery was so intense, and the wording was perfect. i liked it throughout... the emotions were very deep too
keep pennig, this was awesome 
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Beautiful and tragic.
amazing imagery throughout.
this is why i like short poems - when done well like this they leave the reader truly in awe.
best of luck in the contest!!
ElectricBloom
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Wow. Awesome take on the prompt. I love this. This is definitely picking up a shiny! Good luck in the contest love.
Much love
Ylova
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