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Please Rescue Me!

 

 

 

 

There's a man in my room searching for me.

I have seen him a few times in my darkest dreams.

Always abusing and terrorizing me for hours.

 

I am praying that he won't find me here.

I feel so terrified and alone in this world.

Whatever did I do to deserve this treatment?

 

It's not fair that he is hurting me everyday,

I just wish that I could disappear from here.

My heart is beating so fast that I can feel it.

 

My parents are both at work right now,

and have no idea what I am going through.

If only they had listened and believed me.

 

Maybe this is all my fault.

I should have made them believe me.

Instead I put my head down and walked away.

 

Mom and dad have never been understanding.

I don't know why they are this way with me.

If only they knew that I need them now more than ever.

 

He's walking over to me now,

as I hide beneath this twin bed.

Trembling and sweating uncontrollably.

 

How I long to be free from here.

If only I could close my eyes and wake up,

in another place and time.

 

I really need a friend right now,

a hero to save me from this monster.

I hate to think of what he'll do if he finds me.

 

If anyone is out there and can hear me,

please come and rescue me tonight.

I'm begging you with all of my heart.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Prompt #2 http://vladm.deviantart.com/art/A-moment-on-the-bus-40620167

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  • Desire gold member
    December 26, 2008

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    Oh My Word~

    Wowzers this is a Excellent take on the verse my Friend! Love how You took the prompt
    Bravo!!! Woot!

    Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
    -Throws confetti-
    Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo


    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Kari gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    This one really grips you from the heart and tugs at you. I think this is a very powerful piece and one of my favorites that I have seen you write
    Best of luck in the contest.


  • Arkbear gold member
    December 12, 2008

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    The best thing about this write Bro, is your ability to look within your Prompt and alreqady have it all penned in your head before your quill taps the inkwell ~

     

    I have seen many styles of your talent come forth....this is just another example of why you are so blessed with so many Readers of your work ~

     

    Standing ovation, not only for the write, but for taking this Prompt and giving it life.......maybe others will slow down and take a second look at who their children are around.....good luck & God bless Jeremy,

     

    Bear ~


  • Black Narcissus gold member
    December 12, 2008
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    Sadly, too common a problem. Wonderfully written


  • hotchocolate gold member
    December 12, 2008
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    Very well penned here hon and you did great with the prompt! good luck in the contest!


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 12, 2008

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    keep it flowing my friend, there is something about this poem that just hits me as i read it, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    December 12, 2008

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    my story in a twisted way when i went through what you pened here my trap rage side the agony of it all you penned this very well honey good luck i hope you snatch a treat


  • Amber Lee
    December 12, 2008
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    Wow,I love this!Very sad and powerful.

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