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3000

                                    Dreaming,
I'm staring at
                3000 straight pins
                                  in the sand
                                                        pricking and prodding
at my tender feet
                  burned from days
                                      in the sun
There you have it
              my love

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  • Kirs
    December 25, 2008

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    Intense

    It was just that. Every space and alignment was unique, charismatic and full of energy. Well done [insert username here (user info hidden)] haha.


  • aboomer silver member
    December 14, 2008

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    wow - what an image! When one's feet are badly burned, it can feel like thousands of needles prickling.....
    nicely done
    best wishes in the contest