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For Jazzy

When you have everything thing you've wanted,but not yet what you need,

How is that yound found your kindred soul,in a horrible person like me?

Do you know why I'm confused,or why I'm scared to lose.

Hope is not something I've had much,

But since I felt your touch

I swear I feel myself fly,

But could be,I wonder know

That I just feel it die?



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  • Xraided
    December 22, 2008
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    This poem is a bit confusing...like a jumble of words and emotions just spilled onto a page...but almost all of my poems are like that so who am I to criticize? I like how you wrote a poem that people can connect to but its not an overused song..its not a cliche. I also like the structure of the poem and hjow it was written. It really is quite lovely.


    • Mie Silvermoon
      December 22, 2008
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      Thank you so much...Katie right?

      • Xraided
        December 22, 2008
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        Yes it is katie. I am sorry for not putting my reply in a message but my internet is screwed up and I can't reply to any of my messages...quite bothersome actually.