I want to know your heart is
Somewhere in this world
And maybe then I can truly see you
And talk to you for the first time in my life
When I was only young
My associated culture was only lies
But then God gave me you beyond my blessed family ties
I may have been mistaken
Of how you felt for me
But the forest grows tall in my mind
From the deluge of broken tears that fell for you inside my heart
When you were wisked away from my life
I do not know where your heart is
Somewhere beyond time
But maybe I have a small provision
And maybe I'm sitting there this moment with you
So as the days lazily passed foward
You always wanted to stay
Listening and laughing with me gently
Longing to enter my heart for a simplistic moment
I though I could never hold you
Although I wanted nothing more than that
But each moment that I was beside you
Was a silver fragment of true happiness given for my heart
Though now I do not know where your heart is
Maybe I am forgotten
Hopefully I remain in some way
Because you are still there in my mind
As I say this you are so far away
But so close I think you are behind each door
Maybe God will show what will happen one day
Though maybe it will happen
To embrace you in my arms where your heart is
A contest entry
- Is Love Real? by Mistress Masquerade.
3000 points, ended December 17, 2008, 21 entries
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I have to admit, that your opening didn't strike me at all - it is something I have read before and didn't give me any wow.
You have an amazing amount of emotion here but I am missing the imagery that I do so love.
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Awe, this is so heart warming and a very lovely read I enjoyed this. you did a wonderful job. this is very touching. and this makes me smile and reminds me of someone special as well this is very beautiful great write you are very talented =)
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awesome write thanks so much for entering and good luck!
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Beautiful. Thank you for entering, your images were very vivid. best of luck in my contest.
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This is pure beauty Jlreid. Grand job writing this.
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