I gave you my body
I gave you my soul
All you did was make my heart bloody
Sending me outta control
I gave you time
I gave you insight
I made you mine
I made everything alright
I gave you happiness or so I thought
That only love could do
But in reality I guess I oversought
Because nothing mattered to you
I gave you everything I had
Not thinking twice that it was wrong
What did I do to make you mad
I just wanted to feel like I belonged
I gave and you took
Leaving me so empty inside
I had to stop and take a second look
That the love I was sending, you had denied
I gave something to you
That was so pure
What more could I do
The pain I could no longer endure
So in the end despite what I gave
I had to do what any woman would
As much as it would hurt I had to be brave
Because this love was all misunderstood
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amazing.
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Fantastic
I have something similar to this poem myself. You did a great job and I loved the rhyming. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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I really like this! It's great and almost like raw, unorganized chaos, but it's in a rhyming scheme. It interests me. Good job and good luck!
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Not bad, I am not a huge fan of rhyming poetry unless it is incredibly smooth and I felt a couple of places were a mite bit awkward. The sadness and forlorn feelings come through nicely.
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Awh, that's so depressingly sad. I love it, though, thanks so much for entering!
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Very nice! I like the whole concept of misunderstanding you put into it. Thanks for entering!
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Very good!!! You did a great job expressing how you feel... I loved the way you made the rhyming... You did a very good job with that and ill admit i dont think i could rhyme this way... VERY GOOD!!! Keep up the great work and good luck in my contest!
Shannon*Leah
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This poem is really sad that one person could give so much...from reading this poem it seems as if you sacrificed all you had to making your relationship work. I hope that you find the one... this was a good poem.
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Great emotion, I loved your rhyming, it added a sweetness to tune out the bitter. Thank your for entering and best of luck.
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I saw that you entered into my friends contest so I read your poem. I think it’s really good. I’m not too good at poetry my self but I can see it and this is good.
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