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School Slut

i. first impressions

trashy bright lipstick
blaring out at you from hopeful lips
that strive to be pretty
despite the aching red.


ii. after school

cigarette dangles
from hooker-red nails
cloud of noxious smoke drifts
from jaundiced skin beneath
too much concealer.


iii. in class

bent back
and slutty neckline
showing the teacher
all he wants to see.


iv. afterwards

gotta work with what i've got
tough words to you
that ring hollowly as they fall, abandoned
and trampled on by five-inch heels.


v. lunch

see her cheap dye job
fading blond into dirty brown
and wonder who she thinks she's fooling
as she laughs too high-pitched
curling around DeNadi's arm.


vi. locker rooms

see the skirt that covers nothing
and the tank that's smaller than your bra
she's just giving it all away
such a waste of a girl.


vii. next class

called on in class
springs a well-thought out answer
that surprises them all
you smile, because
you knew you had it in her.
now the only question is
why.


viii. passing period

because i can, she answers
a wild animal when she's cornered
but the unspoken words hang heavy in the air
as real as any Marlboro smoke.


ix. confessions

Because I'm not pretty enough.
Because I was never pretty enough.


x. at home

you sit with a cup of coffee
curled in old sweats and a tank
and you realize:
the only person she's fooling--
the only person she wants to fool--
is her mirror.

A contest entry

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  • animalapr
    March 26
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    PURE POETRY!

    absolutely superb... it explainsEXACTLY how imfeeling beleive it or not...rough times.


  • Polaja Greeters member
    December 19, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my contest with this poem this had some very well crafted imagery in it and I liked the way you had it broken into segments of a whole day My favorite part was the "aching red" line in the first stanza - all in all I enjoyed this poem.

    Keep writing

    Polly

  • kaylakodine
    December 12, 2008
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    O.O
    DONATI!!!
    DO-NAT-I...
    OH MY GOD.
    Its his about His Ex isnt it..
    OH MY GOD.
    AHHH!!


    • silvermisery
      December 12, 2008
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      no, oh my god no!!!! I knew how to spell his name, I don't like him that way....god if you'd actually read the poem right, I like the girl i am writing about...who is no one you know....he had an ex?


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    December 12, 2008

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    this was well penned i enjyoed this very much here good luck to you in the contest i hope you snatch a treat

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