Here I lay dying in this cold decrepit place.
Not remembering anyone barely making out any face.
Not sure how I got here, or how my death came to be,
but I know once Im gone Im gone for eternity.
i wasnt expecting death to come so soon, it crept upon me so fast.
I'll always remember the good and happy times of my now meaningless past.
I can feel the blood rush slowly leaking away from my veins.
My cheeks are flawed with my ever pityful tear stains.
As Im remembering my life being so dull and loveless,
Im not regretting my chance to die or becoming such a mess.
The light is leaving my eyes and the world no longer makes a sound.
Im lost here and there is no chance for me to be found.
My heart beats are numbered as the pounding in my chest is slowing.
I cant believe I went through life never knowing.
Never knowing Id end up all alone,
and never knowing Id die here with my heart as cold as stone.
A contest entry
- loneliness by katie-jo.
550 points, ended February 16, 78 entries
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Comments
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Good morning Hannah !!
A very touching , sad and evocative
write and an intense poetic visual
soo skillfully expressed ! Thank you
for sharing , wonderful penning !!
Best always & hugs * friend Easy
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well written poem. good luck inthe contest
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This was so beautiful! This was incredible. I really really liked it! thank you for entering.
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thank you
thank you for the comment!
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this is truly written beautifully. it is so terribly sad and catches your pain in it's every word. i am sorry you ever had to feel this way, but you have conveyed your emotions so well.
thank you for sharing your amazing writing with us all.
Keep writing,
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thank you
thank you so much for your comment! it meant so much to me
Forever and always,
eclipser
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This is written very very well
Thank you ever so much for the compliment on my poem.
Your Poem:
Cold as stone..
I would like to say you write exceptionally well.
It was extremely sad and telling of much honesty.
It was sad that you feel/felt this enough to put your special pen to the paper.
I really liked it and the way it was written capturing
the imagination and leaving me with the hope
you can smile..
I appreciate you sharing this.
Take care
Love Peace,
campanaro
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wow
well thank you i try hard to incorporate my true feelings in poetry as all poets should. Thanks again!
Forever and always,
eclipser
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This is written very well..
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wow, this is very sad and I can see how it feels so lonely, just you and youself at the time. I like the pondering of not knowing whether you would have loved or not. Good job.
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this is so sad.
i love the rhyme, and the way it flows, i love how the emotions are so evident and strong.
thank you for your entry & for sharing this with me.
all the best,
--red
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