When it all comes down to it
the truth is,
that existance is the same thing as slavery,
whether you're a slave to someone
or just an idea
something holds you down
no matter what.
A contest entry
- 20-40 Words by She Stole My Voice.
400 points, ended December 15, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I know its not too good, i haven't written in awhile, but i would love to hear some thoughts on it.
Comments
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Interesting.
Thank you for entering and good luck ♥ -
nah actually this was pretty simple and honest, i dont think you did bad at this at all! in fact i think you did very well love! <3
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Tori,
Existence doens't have to be a slaver, we voluteer for this position. If we are not strong enough to proclaim ourselves and our dreams, then perhaps slavery is all one deserves. Don't let it "take you down", step into the light and claim your ground.
Your poem is filled with truth, poignant and raw, as I have come to expect of your writings. You are already a great poet at 16. Image when you are 50...you will still be espousing the truth. I look forward to it!!
Blessings,
Doris
(Mom)
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