Walking through the trees in pain
Carefully observes by the rain
All she wanted now out of reach
Deaf to the lesson that he tried to teach
She begged him to stay and tried not to cry
But the truth was there in his topaz eyes
Hands on her arms, please don't go
How can she live when no one can know?
As he said the words, he faked for sure
"I don't want you anymore"
He saw in her eye, as he told the lie
Acceptance was there, and he didn't deny
Now stranger lifts her from the ground
Never knowing her world was crashing down
She feels his warmth, not knowing any it better
Another such warmth would turn her future forever
It's that unconditional love that would be her doom
She's looking blindly into a New Moon
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Author notes
I tried alot of the options for this. I'll try to name them in order, #2 with Bella and Edward (How can ANYONE decide? Especially after Breaking Dawn??), #4 with the rhyme...I rhyme in most of my poems if you come across one of mine that doesn't then that is the exception and not the norm, #5 in a way...I mean Bella WAS addicted to Edward (she was addicted to his voice in New Moon and thats the book this is about), #6 with the heartbreak ....I don't think I have to tell anymore on that as you are a fan of twilight, and OF COURSE #7 though I picked New Moon it IS still a Twilight book and therefor falls under the catagory of twilight.
Yes, this is the part where Edward leaves Bella (I only say that for the non twilight readers that come across this...if you havent read it, suffice to say that everyone who reads it cries if they have a heart.....its New Moon, do YOU know where YOUR tears are??).
-Andi-
A contest entry
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550 points, ended December 22, 2008, 27 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Well no,
I'm not famous yet.
Lol
I've got a youtube and like recording songs unfortunately, I've got trouble uploading songs lately, but wen it's fixed, I'll put it up.
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I will! when i'm done i'll record it and add it to my you tube.
but i'll send you the lyrics before i do that...
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You'll actually record it??
Am I talking to someone famous here??? XDD
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omg this is really good! would you mind if i used this to make a song?
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under one condition....you HAVE to let me read the song lyrics!!
Other then tat, I'm fine with it!
-Andi-
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I cried while reading the book. SOOOOOO MUCH.
But i also just cryied right now while reading your poem. It was so beautiful. Absolutly breathtaking!!
Well done and good luck. Thank you so much for your astonishingly heart renching entry.
For this tou've made i into my finalists list
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Thank you...and sorry I made you cry, while it IS a sad poem I never like the idea of that!!
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I have not read it but I quite enjoyed this poem and after reading the author notes will probably now read the book you speak of.
Beautifully written
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You havent read new moon?? Ouch...I feel for you!
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Sheesh, yet another obsessed teen! If someone reads this, they're not going to automatically associate it with some mediocre vampire series. Although it may inspire you, there should be some sort of drive to create your own work, independently. Poetry isn't supposed to have a specific, or limited audience. The idea is to touch lives universally, through an artistic medium.
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Yes, I'm another obsessed teen. However I write much more then fan fiction, this is the exception. The only reason I wrote it was for a school project. Though, given the opprotunity and the idea, I would gladly write all the Twilight-themed poems in the world.
I understand what you mean about poetry, and I agree with you, but not every poem can reach every person. Some people don't care to read about a certain subject. Maybe the person that reads about this won't want to read about, say, music for example. And maybe there is a person who only wants to read poems about music but not about this. I write on a variety of subjects to try and reach a variety of people. And, yes, that includes the occasional fan poem.
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I like this poem a lot. However, I would leave out the Stephenie Meyer association. Any woman can relate to this piece, especially if there's the chance of losing their love.
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True, but...
Not every man has topaz eyes, not every man (upon leaving a loved one) lies to convince her he doesn't want her, not every girl is rescued by a wolf (in human form), not every girls future would be affected by said wolves, there is not a new moon at every break up, there...you get the idea. I used alot of metaphors and I tried not to be specific name-wise because I wanted to see if anyone would guess what it wa about before being told (EVERYONE did upon reaching the word 'topaz'). It was originally written to be fanfiction/fan poetry
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