I got the news a year ago
Was happy and content.
My husband too was overcome
With a joyous intent.
I’d soon have to quit from work,
For ‘bout a year or two.
Our finances were terrible
But well just what to do!
We’d need to paint the house so that
It’s rid of all mildew.
We also did the spring cleaning
Threw out what wasn’t new.
My husband got us lots of books
To read and learn by heart,
Bringing a baby to this world
Is an acquired art.
Our checklist just went on and on,
Work just didn’t seem to stall.
I’d run home straight from my work,
And he’d go to the mall.
He bought the things he thought we’d need,
Once baby did arrive.
And I made sure each inch at home,
Was safe for her to thrive.
The doctor too was someone who,
Would take some of our time.
And though we both hate hospitals
No one could catch us whine.
The labor lasted thirty hours,
Nine months had passed away,
Today we have a baby girl,
And life in disarray!
A bit of mess is everywhere,
I dread the times she wails.
It’s all about the baby now,
I miss romantic days.
But truth be told, this disarray’s
A superficial thing
“All” parents feel at some odd time
They’re tied up with a string
True we have our moments when
It gets a bit too much
But if we had to change a thing
We would not even touch.
This is the charm of parenthood,
It has so many hues,
In stressful times, a baby’s smile
Can walk you through your blues.
We eagerly embrace our child
To care for and protect,
And overturned our world might be,
For us it’s just perfect!
Author notes
http://allpoetry.com/Villa-KatPat
Prompt :"upside down"
Any style, any length.
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Comments
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This was so lovely to read, particualrly as my sister is getting married soon and wnats to have kids pretty soon afterwards, so it's like a little insight to what their life will be like with a child there-
wonderfully descriptive! thanks for entering
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Lovely
This is one of the sweetest poems I have ever read.
It really does put into words the emotion and feelings that are felt when bringing a child into the world. I really love it, thanks for entering. -
a very nice piece thanks for sharing
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So many parents these days quit loving each other because they feel the baby is leeching it all, but it is nice to see a couple who still made it. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.
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World turned upside down, never to right itself!
I helped deliver both my children, and now that they are adults I wonder at the miracle that they survived our parenting!
And soon enough their worlds will upend.
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Despite a little meter trouble in the first stanza, this is an accomplished poem that can speak to any parent, my mom would have agreed totally.
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Ha to coe back and read this again. Is such a special poem xx
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An excellent poem detailing what most couples go through on the birth of their first baby. I have two daughters and two grandchildren and believe me the upheaval doesn't stop when they marry and have a family of their own, but I remember it all as though it were yesterday and I still marvel at a new life.
I agree with one of your comments below, your rhyme is very good, but your flow is off in a couple of places, read it aloud and if necessary look for alternative words to help.
All the best...Sue
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Has brought me to my knees sobbing........
I lost my son to miscarriage and wish for all the world I got to see my little boy and cradle him in my arms, catch a glimpse of his smiley face x I envy you you're bundle of joy xx A very emotional write invoking an emotional response xx -
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Am so sorry..
.. that this poem brought back such terrible memories.
We can complain as much as we can about our babies/children but we cannot live without them.
that is what my poem emphasises too... -
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No apology needed hun, your poem was great and I still have my son close to my heart.. always.
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This is a wonderfully expressed poem.
You have written honestly about how your life changed when your baby was due to arrive and after she arrived.
But I am sure she's a bundle of joy!
This poem goes well with the contest prompt.
Good luck in the contest.
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Thanks Har i drew from my emotions but our story was very different... and we have a son
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That's a great description of the pitfalls of childbearing. Though my son is in his forties I remember it well. I like your style of writing with its easy going cadence and flow, however, after reading a few pieces I suggest you go back and re-edit more carefully. Time will take care of this eventually but for now pay attention to the details and your choice of words. When a word doesn't work consult your thesauris for a comparable replacement. Happy trails and keep writing.
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thankyou for the feedback. Yes, i do need to re-edit and pay more attn to the details... will do that each hour as thoughts and words keep coming to me.
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