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Life

I fall
I crash
I hit the ground far to hard
My bones are broken
And body lays shattered
While the people pass in the streets
The pain is nothing
Compaired to being invisable
And not haveing a voice
To compell me to go home
Days pass and nothing changes
The light is still far gone
And people still pass
I am indefiatly invisable
Untill I'm strong enough to rise
And walk along with the people
Who never noticed how dead I was


I walk
I run
I do anything to get away
The street is buisy and full
No one notices another lonely sole
No feeling but being part of the crowd
No stoping unless you want the pain to catch up
A gential hand is felt, leading me away from the people
A tender hand holds mine, telling me
It will be okay and maybe I'm not so dead
A soft smile warms his lips
Saying all the words I need to hear

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  • MusicIsMyLifeline
    December 12, 2008

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    *compared
    *invisible
    *having
    *compel
    *indefiantly?
    *until
    *busy
    *lonly
    *soul
    *stopping
    * gentle?

    i think thats it.
    good work though


  • meggie94x
    December 11, 2008
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    i like it, but u absolutely fail at spelling. i cant even correct all those errors. lol =P