The moon's simple curse cast a spell,
over my bitter dreams.
In a world where no words are to be found,
our conversation seems to turn to 'love.'
Waiting until the day these words reach you.
In this heart that is still tainted with scars,
my lips speak of my souls desire.
A wish that longs to be untold is beginning to break.
In the dream that I will never see,
in your arms where I feel safe.
I await your comfort in the blinding moon-light.
The moon's simple curse cast a spell,
over my bitter dreams.
I long for the wish that needs to be released.
I will strive to a place in which I can
believe in your love.
A contest entry
- The Moon by Dragonbabyx3.
1000 points, ended December 23, 2008, 27 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
A contest entry
Comments
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you know you are very young but you write very well
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Very god job on this one, you do know how to capture your reader in the first few lines. good job
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This is stunning!!! Beautifully worded, imagery is brilliant! One thing though, many of your words, are captialized which dont need to be, line 2, Dreams,line 7, souls, line 8, break, line 9 dream, line 13 dreams, line 14 wish and released, line 16 love. It distracted from the over all poem. The words were driven through the mind by the previous wording, so emphasizing them with the shift key doesnt help, just becomes a little frustrating when your reading. Other than that, Its a beautifully written piece. One that captures the imaganation, and flows perfectly. Thankyou for entering and Good Luck!
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