How to piss off your enemies by Disturbed Prodigy at All poetry

Bleed me dry,
place my body upon
the proverbial cross.
But know this,
that which you
have named criminal
in life. You have
made a Martyr in death

Author notes

Just a thought you that came to me just now, if you know what it means i would be happy if you were to tell me, i have no clue, keep it flowing

Aaron

i do plan to edit so any and all advise is welcome, or just drop a line and tell me what you think

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KatherineAnne
November 19, 2009

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I don't think this needs to be edited at all. I didn't see that coming lol. A great way to piss off an enemy. Martyrdom.

Keep penning (:

-Kati Anne
Sector-Hunter
November 17, 2009

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I am not sure what you are asking about what someone thinks. I do know that is a great way to piss off your enemies. They want to kill you but dont want to deal with the after math. Great work SH
karma-n-peace
November 15, 2009

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Very deep wisdom penned here!
Makes me think of all the many Americans that have been charged, convicted and executed (or worse, spent 30 to 40 years in prison)
for crimes they were later exonerated of.
LOVE IT!
OlympianVampiress
October 27, 2009
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this is a good poem Aaron, keep up the good work
Sinner69
October 26, 2009

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great
i really enjoyed this sometimes people are so blinded by there ways they convince themselves there way is the only way....not..i liked this alot..
Meroza
December 19, 2008
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This is dark, this is evil, this is twisted, and I love it ^_^
lillypilly
December 18, 2008
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hmmm i like very sweetly morbid..xxpixi..
goingnowherefast
December 16, 2008
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i liked this alot and i think it rings true for many people
LadyDementia
December 12, 2008

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This speaks volumes despite its brevity. A very sweet read hun! Reads kinda like a warning, at least thats how I see it
lunarlunacy
December 11, 2008

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I take from it the banality of our judgemental society, and how taboos become trend and vice versa, that true individuality cannot be constrained, etc.. It would seem to me at the first three lines read personal and the rest is more of an Everyman stance, but that could be to the inflection I place upon it as reader. This has some real solid potential, but definetly in dire need of a sharp transitional phrase to tie the above two together. If ya tinker with it, lemme know.
peace,
A.
Bob Fox
December 11, 2008

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My take
I could read into this two ways. Perhaps the mind that is torturing you & bringing on self doubt or maybe just a lobe gone bad. But tis deep & caused me to think.
jinsays
December 11, 2008

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Whew.
well all I know is I will try never to piss you off.
I love it darlin, it's strong, no BS, and it goes straight for the throat.
Love always,
Jin

PS, get rid of the period and add a comma? at the end of LIFE. . .
Semi colon would work too love.
Titus
December 11, 2008

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Bleed me dry,
place my body upon
the proverbial cross.
But know this,
that which you
have named criminal
in life. You have
made a Martyr in / (me)
excellent
chilali
December 11, 2008

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WOW! Aaron. In just a few words, you have made me go *jaws drop* This is awesome.I am in awe!! Well done love.

Best wishes,
Ylova
Deathless1
December 11, 2008

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i agree with your notes about having no clue what it could mean.
and i am deep.... and the title had me thinking in a hole different way.
but it dose have flow to it.