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Life's Veritable Fruit Basket

Radiance is the sensual tangerine dusk
Which befalls the sultrily shaded land.

Creativity is the slim tanned finger
Tracing intricate patterns in the sand.

Beauty is the elegant, sophisticated young lady
Selfless, giving, patient and true.

Innocence is the amazed young child
Who is overjoyed, and clinging to you.

Truth is the clear, pure, calm lake
Concealing no lies in it's crystallised depths.

All of these virtues are in Life's Fruit Basket
Beautiful, dazzling, and eternally safe kept.

Author notes

This was written when I was very, very bored, and remembering the FANTASTIC sunset we had a few days ago!

A contest entry

Should I enter this in a contest somewhere? XD

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  • innocence jaded.xx
    January 18, 2009

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    8.3

    I like where you were going with this, but I definitely think you could do more with it. It was brilliant, all together. I love how you wrote this piece. Thank you for entering. (:


  • Walk-Free
    January 1, 2009

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    this was an amazing read.

    i became more and more interested in this poem after i read each line.

    the metaphors are truly beautiful.

    thanks and have a blessed new year


  • Trupoet
    December 11, 2008
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    Beautiful..

    Wonderfully penned here, thanks for your entry!


  • chilali
    December 11, 2008

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    WOW! THis is so beautiful love. I love the imagery. Love it, love it, love it. and YESSS you should enter it into a contest! You should pick up a shiny very easily with this stunning poem of yours. Muah!

    Keep it flowing

    Much love
    Ylova


    • go away.
      December 11, 2008
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      Thankies! YAY! SHINY! *Chases after rich AP peeps with loads of big fat trophies* xx

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