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Grasping For Love

one by one,
    she plucks little hairs
                    from my chest

‘she wants to know?’

do you love me,
            or is it- 
                          you don’t?

slowly

I trace,
the small of her back

she moans,

while her nails, dig deep
into my skin

I cannot answer

the turtle is lost,
        within his shell 

and feels,

this pain of wanton love; 
        long after,
              the emergence to beauty

is tied to an act,
          of conflicting,
                                    affection



Author notes

split to the seams... of mind and heart

crush= inside-outside

perceived, how 'it is' with me.

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  • crivanea silver member
    August 18

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    let me turn on the AC a little bit lower wow...you know...you have such a way with words..especially with sensual/love poems...your lines are always more metaphorical..more bittersweet...more bold than other love poems I read... I love your style of writing..you seem to pen a poem so effortlessly with a few proper line arrangement and you have another masterpiece your concrete words that doesn't hide under flowery adjective..your perspective and perfect timing to add in the dramatic flair...just wonderful M

  • Aisades
    December 14, 2008

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    I like this. Very very sexy stuff here. I like the deliberative feel of this.. the hopeful gaze of the woman I can almost picture. I love the imagery in this. Hot stuff..


  • sunoir
    December 14, 2008

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    Sad and beautiful. Romantic yet leaves questions lingering in a mind. I'll have to read more of your works because this one is truly excellent!


  • Maylette
    December 13, 2008

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    The first three lines of this captured my interest immediately, this strikes a chord with areas of my life that I thought were over, and it adds a bittersweet power to your words this poem is lovely and I love the way you have expressed yourself here!

    ♦ M


  • Dalaney gold member
    December 12, 2008

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    bookmarked because this is absolutely
    a poem i want to read again and to study -
    you are exceptional when it comes to such
    subtle yet extremely sensuous poetry. I
    love this, Mally. Laney xxoo


    • Malabu
      December 14, 2008
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      do you love me too? laney
      i'm such a dreamer...
      and then, there is vou...

      mal


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    December 11, 2008

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    ohhh Malabu, this has a hint of sadness, but there is hope for you yet, good luck in the contest
    VOE


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    December 11, 2008

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    we so tend to do this,
    fear destroys potential bliss we seem to understand this when it is too late, and strangely enough repeat it.

    the secret to love is trust, and if it doesn't word we have lovely memories

    so creativeexcellent write

     

    I love the turtle metophor

    God bless you my friend...

    *hug*

     

     

  • ElectricBloom
    December 11, 2008

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    wow,
    this is amazingly.
    i love it, im almost speechless.
    gorgeous imagery throughout, and i love the line breaks and the way the poem is set out. i especially love the lines :

    the turtle is lost,
    within his shell

    beautiful metaphor,
    and a beautiful poem - well done!

    thank you, i truly enjoyed reading this
    and best of luck in the contest you have entered!!

    ElectricBloom

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