Harsh words tumbling in the air
I still need him but he doesn't care,
My fragile soul begins to tear
The torment I now endure isn't fair
He used me, abused me, made me frail
And now I think, what can the future entail?
It must be bleak without him by my side
But to him - I was just a fairground ride
Stay with me for a fast, rushed fling,
Then stroll away as if we were nothing
Callously, deceitfully, he abandoned me (why?!)
And I can't give him up - alone I cry.
Author notes
This was for a contest!!! 
Please R&R. xxx
A contest entry
- .give me something amazing. by landmark.
1650 points, ended January 7, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
This was written for a contest - good enough?
Comments
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This is very impressive. Your rhyme and rhythm, in my opinion are very much on the money. Good job. Shancy.
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Brava!
Dear CA,
The anguish of young love is eloquently stated here... My wish for you is that you always keep the
beautiful memories, let the sadness go and look to the future love that will come to you...
Your true love is yet to come...
So in a way your old love was preparing the way for your future heart's delight and this time there will be no pain because it will last foverer!!!
BUT, I am a romantic!
You poem touched my heart! Brava!
Jane
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Wow. This is amazing love. Good luck in the contest and keep it flowing
Much love
Ylova
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Thanks hun! Lol; you really are active.
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