I
She often found herself
reading the walls of rest rooms;
the confessions were crude,
but she was comforted
by the casual spirit of her own
love [of] life.
II
It was at the traffic lights
that she grasped a moment
of thought with him,
but, the amber light
always waved her back
before she realised what she felt.
III
He loved it when
she fucked him
because he knew
they were almost making love.
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i really like this,
it is a new input on this picture,
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oh wow emotion that stabs the inner core of your emotions themselves Love it! the ending stanza is my favorite part. I have seen this form of writing done alot any more. I have never myself tried to write one like this. I do think that yours is one of the better ones I have read. Keep up the good work best of luck to you in the future and with your writing.
andi
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deep
I liked the third phrase I think that can relate 2 a lot of ppl and it was a great read, thankyou for sharing it with me.
great pic 2 by the way very artistic
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Stanza 1 wonderful! Stanza 2 in the first line, "lights" (plural) line 4, "light" (singular), maybe both plural? but I get the larger inclusion of all traffic lights in 'amber light', just a thought. Stanza 3, the most powerful of the three for me, it shines a light into the psychology of relationship and perceptions of men and women. it also has a little more grit to it than the preceeding two. I like that finish to the piece. I think "Wait" is a simplistic title for the inpact of the piece, but I enjoyed the gravity of the body of the work after taking in the title, so it does not lessen the poem. Terrific poetry.
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