Only a few more weeks,
He tells me,
Until I'm up North
And his little girl.
Until I see the snow
fall like crazy,
When it's such a rare
delicacy here.
I'll finally get to hold my
One and only,
My secret
I love you.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Heart first: by Randomly Beautiful.
1000 points, ended January 24, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Gosh I LOVE short and sweet poems and yours fits the bill perfectly. It's such a unique take on a love story, another thing I love! Thanks for this great write!
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Well I like it I like that you used imagery to put the poem in a dramatic scenario, like the lines, "Until I see the snow/Fall like crazy/When it's such a rare/Delicacy here" is good,enjoyed
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I enjoyed this piece. Beautiful, simple, straight to the point with a hidden message.
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this poem is cute and simple and i like how you have titled it something that doesnt really fit with the poem, however that title ties it together and makes it fit, keep up the writing, ~Amy
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GOOD STUFF !! ....
I like the flow of this piece. As a free-form construction it works very well but maybe you should lose the punctuation and capital letters to make the narrative slightly more enigmatic. Just a suggestion of course.
Good luck with your writing !
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Thought-provoking
At first I thought this may be for a lover, but then I reread it and thought possibly you're father? I am intrigued because of the feeling of being unsure. Please appease me with an answer as to who it is for!
I like it very much, and I cannot wait to read some more stuff!
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oo, really, i actually love this. There is something that sparks my imagination, that completely embraces me. this poem is excellent. I am going 2 add you 2 my favourites. im not sure why.
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