celestial twilight twinkling
with gentle zephyrs wafting
in wary silence watching
illumined others moving
their thoughts with laughter masking
in faceless crowds they’re making
unnoticed presence being
content to be observing
unseen in darkness seeing
alone in shadow standing
as two draw nigh embracing
their privacy assuming
averted eyes withdrawing
to deeper darkness gliding
while nothing there becoming
Author notes
The image is of Wassily Kandinsky's "Improvisation"
In a list
A contest entry
- Improvisation of the Abstract. . . by JinSays.
735 points, ended December 16, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Honorable Mention Pre-Write by Leance.
450 points, ended July 19, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I thought I had this contest judged and bagged already, then along comes your entry.
Absolutely brilliant.
Heavy, sardonic, honest, real.
WONDERFUL.
THANK YOU for taking the time to enter this contest. I wasnt sure about Kandinsky's work as a prompt. I didn't think people would "get it". . .was I surpised?
Ohmy, yes.
I wish you the best in this contest.
Love always,
Jin
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thumbs up!
well penned!
i just love it.. keep on inspiring us, dear sir!!
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this is a lovely mind bend that like does twisty flips with words which i love
unnoticed presence being
content to be observing
unseen in darkness seeing
i
this stanza best
whats this got to do with orangeatangs?
A+ this is golden totally
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