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Desolation

I live upon a once pure land
from beyond the atmosphere

where life exists, it transforms,
drawing a picture of landscapes
etched in minuscule detail
breathtakingly beautiful

Upon the land, nothing so grand
tread upon and bled
devastation and waste abound
an atmosphere struggling, loosing
greed inflicts huge wounds
scarring the landscape
war contributes
pollution lays to waste
rendering useless

I live on a land no longer pure
from under the atmosphere

where life exists
it is transformed,
drawing a picture of landscapes
etched in vivid detail
describing man's betrayal

Our past demands retribution

frailty more evident each passing day
a land full of poverty and hate
the past heavily laden
in ecological disgrace
unable to bear weight
a land in motion,
its people stagnant

I live on a land no longer pure
unable to rebound 
constant ignorance
driven by basic or preconceived need

 the future forecast desolation
I pray, I am mistaken




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  • MJ Forgives
    August 5
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    Ahhh it was really amazing. I loved it. I hope you do well and thanks for entering this contest.


  • FaerieNWonderland
    December 12, 2008
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    amazing!
    i loved this


  • Wolfdog silver member
    December 12, 2008

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    Superb plus

    Ah, I echo your prayer. You express your ideas quite well, indeed. Thanks for sharing this one with us.


  • thegirlsafaultline.
    December 12, 2008
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    "Upon the land, nothing so grand
    tread upon and bled
    devastation and waste abound
    an atmosphere struggling, loosing
    greed inflicts huge wounds
    scarring the landscape
    war contributes
    pollution lays to waste
    rendering useless"
    I like this part alot(:
    Great write.