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Margo

She sits at her vanity table
Blind, old, and worn.
Her blue eyes still sparkle like sapphire diamonds
But her heart is torn.
Alone she sits, brushing her silver hair.
A tear slowly falls from her cheek,
She wishes he was there.
Her finger catches a single tear
As she touches the mirror wishing him there.
"Jared, I call upon thee
Jared, my love return to me".
She closed her eyes tightly, wishing hard.
Then she winced in pain, cut by the mirror's shard.
She didn't know how nor why.
Into her hands she started to cry.
As she softly cried, her blood mixed with tears.
Hands softly touched her, the touch she missed for years.
Opening her eyes, blinded by light,
"You can see now, Margo. I'm here for you tonight"
She saw her husband standing there
And saw herself sitting face down in her chair.
She looked at the mirror, and what did she see?
Her dark hair and sparkling blue eyes of beauty.
Jared kissed Margo softly
And said, "My love, I have returned to thee.
As you know, it is time for us to go.
Never again shall we sever,
For our love lasts forever".

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prompt: a blind girl at the mirror

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Comments

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  • jsweenor
    November 5
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    I realy liked the way it flows.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    August 24
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  • wander of the sky
    August 7
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    this is sad beautiful and very telling
    2 soul mates forever


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    August 1

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    Hmmmm, I like this and the way it tells a story. I don't like the name Margo, but it suited this character perfectly. Thought provoking and rather philosophical in many ways.


    • songstress80
      October 19
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      Actually the poem came from an idea i got from a book titled "Margo" that I read a couple of years ago. I think the author's name was Dana Reed. I could be wrong thought, it's been awhile. But anyway, I basically wrote the poem based on a part in the book and put my own ideas in it. It had a sad ending that's all I remember. I like my version better.

      :0)


  • Antebellum
    July 19

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    She sits at her vanity table
    Blind, old, and worn.
    Her blue eyes still sparkle like sapphire diamonds
    But her heart is torn.


    amazing imagery.thanks so much for enterin.


  • Perfect Asymmetry
    June 4

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    A truly amazing piece, so emotional. I loved the imagery and the words you used, everything just fits perfectly.
    Well done!
    Nela


    • songstress80
      July 10
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      thanks for your kindness and thoughtful words...they were very much appreciated...I was hopeing that they all came together as a whole and fitted perfectly...lol!
      thanks again, always glad to see your comments!

  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 19
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    awww
    sad


    • songstress80
      July 10
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      thanks for the comment
      sorry it made you cry :0(
      but it's what i was going for...lol


  • Amazon Huntress
    December 14, 2008

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    Interesting interpretation of the dream with a touching story told. Check spelling in line #20.
    Thanks for entering!
    *~Huntress~*

  • midnight-whisper
    December 11, 2008

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    Very touching poem. I love the idea of her being called home and her departed husband is the one that takes her there. I am just thrown off by the way you worded line #19, "Opening her eyes, blinded by light" She is blind to begin with. IT would have been more touching if she had done something else that sighted people do, like squint, or shade her eyes or even get taken aback by the brightness. Anyway, I get where your going with it and I think it is a lovely poem. Good luck in the contest.


    • songstress80
      May 21
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      touched

      i'm touched by your comment and appreciate your thoughts on the poem. i'm going to leave the poem the way it is but i do like your idea. maybe i'll be able to use it in a future work. thanks again for your comment and i'm glad you enjoyed it! as for the whole being called home and all that, i truely believe that when our time comes that we see many of our departed relatives on the other side.

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