"It's dark out there."
"It's okay; the sun is coming."
Author notes
I believe the greatest challenge facing writers is how to put a lot of meaning into the fewest words possible. This is a new style I will try to pursue. Let me know if I should.
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Now that is a splendid challenge. And one, I believe, you are quite well suited to. You certainly put some depth in these few words. Something seems to linger here that isn't readily apparent upon first glance, and I was pulled to read it again. I would be delighted to read any more of this style that you come up with.
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Awesome job. SO short yet full of truth. Keep it up, man. Pursue it!
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Interesting, I like how your trying to create a new style in your writing! It's just a new way to look at things, which I always like to see.
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Thank you.
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This works out well... Darkness may be interpreted as 'Ignorance' and Sun as 'Knowledge' - going for literal meaning of it gives a real positive energy... 'It's okay' is the soothing agent here...THough it's such a common usage and used in all common situations, it philosophizes big truths most of the times...
I like the way you write...
Thanks for sharing
Luv and regards
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I was really hoping someone would analyze it the way you did. Thanks a lot. I'm glad you got strong meaning out of it.
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nice,
It portrays hope,in such few words,
I as well like to try this method every now and then.
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Thank you very much. Yeah, it's good to change styles every so often.
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very brutal and full of of hope...obviously. i like it. so your going for couplets it seems? not a new style?
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I'm not sure. This was an experiment. No idea if I'll do something like this again. But thanks for liking it.
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It's within the soaring of the winds your soul must follow. A day in the morning new, just as you keep sharing you.
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Thank you. Hell, your comment is almost a poem.
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I think you should but I think its to short, I feel like I'm still waiting for something to happen. *shrugs* maybe it's just me
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I thought about going with more, but I can't help but feel it's fine the way it is.
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Are you wanting to try to make it a poem in and of it's self, or just a quick way to say something deep, meaningful, and powerful? If it is a poem in and of it's self, it would need to have strong titles to help the reader understand the point you are making. ie, in this poem, had it not been for the title I would have been completly confused! I think you should try and see where it goes, it may be intresting, or it may not go over well, but you'll never know unless you try! Good luck!
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It is supposed to be a poem of itself, and I actually think the title fits quite well, even if it isn't immediately apparent. But anyway, thank you.
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Oh! I am so glad you wrote this because I was hoping today the sun will come out but it didn't. Gosh that is part of why I am sad.
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Wow, that is the quicket comment I've ever seen! I hadn't even had this up for a minute! Well, I'm sorry you're sad. Do you think this kind of style has enough potential to work?
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I am facing Christmas blue.
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